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compose vs tony green
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10-30 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting NO CREW VOTES AT ALL! 4-0 KO 300 TO VOTE TOPIC: YOU MUST LOVE ME The Council vs Livin' Legendz Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 04-30-05 at 10:30 AM Must drop verse in 4620 minutes after check in. |
Tony Green has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-29-05 08:01 PM.
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Compose has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-29-05 09:02 PM.
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What I'm about to spit is true stories that happened in the hood.
In the hood I stay feeling like 1million bucks. The kids run to my pickup like its the ice cream truck. So I get out and I shake a few hands, tell'em not to be bad. And for your moms try to be a big man. I sit and talk to some of my old hustlers off the block. They like Lil Steve got shot, and Markus got million dollar yhatts. I visit Lil Steve mom give her a check for his funeral. Tell her like get you a nice dress and a nice black limo.(I Must Love Her) . . . . . . I remember a shorty my mama was working 9-5. It was me on the grind influencing my little brothers mind. I never went to one school dance cause I was helping mama. Rent money late Land Lord coming with the drama. She had been arguing with her ex-boyfriend Kevin. Land Lord brought more drama, 3 shots it was a 187. Mama was gone for 6 years then she made parole. I'm out their standing in the pole hustling in the rain or snow. When she I got out I save a thousand bucks. Put it in a hallmark card told her get your hair done. And before she drove off to have her night of fun. I'll never forget she looked back and said I love you son.(She Must Love Me) R.I.P Mama 1970-1997 |
You must love me Naive Love is entrusted with a remarkable strike to one another connected with trust and honorable without studder but when its introduced in the wrong hands like crazy bitches catastrophe is bound to proceed, the effect more then stitches the women i speak about...the ones who bother continuously cuz she's in love...for a person in the midst of her dreams she hasnt a grasp inside to carry out her wishes so a plan she devises to kidnap the man she misses tools and screws used to compile the weapons she takes not to use on her mark...but all else who stand in her way Affirmative Action Followed the man through the day...to the bank and workplace observed his repeated actions...what he did where he stayed till the day she commenced her plan to take this man hostage he was a pet toy hence her rolling him in stockings she was a freaky case of wacko...ballistic jacko jackson like michael but cut off the mans dick without hassle talk about experiences...this is one most cant read with ease of a senseless bitch taking coke, dust, and speed what kinda influence provoked this, none? nada? to where she exploded a face...but it wasnt a piñata Love This couldnt be a story someone thought was movin... its not love...its the definition of someone whos inhumane one whos mind is tapped into believing that love is anger but anger leads to hurt...then the hurt becomes a danger |
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This was feedback posted for Compose
You won this easily man. Uppin this for ya........
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This was feedback posted for Compose
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This was feedback posted for Tony Green
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This was feedback posted for Compose
Is Dis pose ta be a battle? Cuz if it is why yall not getin at each utha?
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This was feedback posted for Compose
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Voted For: Compose
compose- you had a consistent solid verse, the emotion was potent throughout your piece. i felt your imagery could have been improved upon though. your structure was on-point making it easy to follow. the vocabulary was tight, it wasn't so complicated that it affected your flow so it was cool. my favourite bar out the whole drop had to be.. the women i speak about...the ones who bother continuously cuz she's in love...for a person in the midst of her dreams so, i'd give you 80% :thumbup:. tony green- your drop wasn't as consistent as composes, but you had a nice story. it was worded well but because some lines were uneven it fucked up your flow. your vocabulary was decent, quite basic but you pulled it off. emotion wasn't strong, and i felt neither was the imagery. just elevate on emotion and imagery and you'll do fine as a topical head. overall this was a decent piece. my favourite bar.. I sit and talk to some of my old hustlers off the block. They like Lil Steve got shot, and Markus got million dollar yhatts. i give you 50% :). so... v/compose. he just came harder in all areas. no hate tony. rtf in my sig. |
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