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MyNamesGrafhYall 05-22-05 02:39 PM

Freestyle
 
I HIT EM AT DA DOME, LIKE BLAW BLAW BLAW//HOW DO U LIKE ME NOW?//WONDERIN HOW, HOW CAN THEORY CAUSE SO MUCH KHAOS//EZ...I PLAY WIT CHU KIDZ LIKE PLAYERZ/BREAK MIH VERSE DOWN IN LAYERS//MOTHER FUCKER SAY YO PRAYERS//DA MC SLAYER NEVER FAZED BUT ALWAYZ ENIVED//EVIDENTLY I'M SICKER DEN YO AVERAGE//DA SAVAGE, DOIN HIZ THING AN AT JUST AN EARLY AGE//FLIP THE PAGE, CHECK YA DICTIONARY AN U SEE ME//RIGHT NEXT TOO THE TERM ....G.O.A.T :shoot:

MyNamesGrafhYall 05-22-05 02:51 PM

I Wrote Dat In Lyke 2 Minutes Niggaz Wut Did Yall Think

Viva 05-22-05 02:59 PM

r u an alias? lol

MyNamesGrafhYall 05-22-05 03:05 PM

Wut? Did U Read Da Flow? Iz It Okay? Itz A Freestyle Dat I Wrote In 2 Minutez Fo Yall

SexyChick1338 05-22-05 03:56 PM

Your structure was off, also in the first bar it didn't rhyme which made that part suck. So work on ya strucuture and flow. I would give you a 4/10

MyNamesGrafhYall 05-22-05 04:01 PM

Datz Rude Buit Thanx Fo Da Commentz Wuld U Like Too Rate My Battle Verse Diz Mah First Battle Niggaz

Yo Disses Are Short Changed, For U Fellow MC'Z O'z Are Bankrupt//Guess Datz Why U In Da REDZONE, Never On Da Come'Up//Stick Da Emotion ThumbUp, Cyberly Givin U Propps//Fake Recognize Fake Aye?? Yo Flowz Immitatin Milli Vanilli Dropps//Pull Out All Da Stoppz, Because Datz Where It Stoppz, You'd Have Too Steal My Mic//Your Never A Step Ahead, Lyke Cheating In A Walk Race On A Byke//Your Da Illest Yeah? Booo! Hahaa SYKE//Diz Pussy Getz Fucked Lyke A Set Of Twin Dykez//I Really Dunt Wanna Fight, Mainly Becuz Ahm NICE//It Wuldnt Be Fair On U, Even Tho Erry Hooker Has HIS Price//Ur Nuthin Mo Than Vice City, Rappin Shitty An Getting Played By Kidz//U Culdnt Even Sell Yo Shitz On Ebay With Free Bidz//Try Watching Porno Vidz, Releaze A Little Tension//We All Need Elevation, But U Need A Fucking Suspension///Im Da Newest Kid On Da Block, So Diz Why He Loves Me//Got Me Confuzed Wit Da Boy Band An He Sayz Ahm Lovely//Ur Pretty Gay, Attrracting Cock Like A Sausage Fest///If Life Wuz A Metaphour Diz Whore Is Happy Being Second Best

mizz fyre 05-22-05 06:00 PM

ummm i really ain't feelin your structure at all....try to structure your lines like this

Yo Disses Are Short Changed, For U Fellow MC'Z O'z Are Bankrupt//
Guess Datz Why U In Da REDZONE, Never On Da Come'Up//
Stick Da Emotion ThumbUp, Cyberly Givin U Propps//
Fake Recognize Fake Aye?? Yo Flowz Immitatin Milli Vanilli Dropps//

then try to make each line near enough the same length so your flow stays consistent......

MyNamesGrafhYall 05-22-05 06:03 PM

Yea I Worked Dat Out Check Mah Battle Wit Affiction, I Changed Da Stylez Bcuz B-Gurl Helped Me

AckRite 05-22-05 06:13 PM

Jeah Ya Structure Is GARBAGE Fam..........But Work On Dat & Ya Creativity Ya Shit Wasnt Creative You Jus Bunched Words 2gether

You Did This In 2 Minutes?? Jeah No Wonder...Dont Do Dat Again!

MyNamesGrafhYall 05-22-05 06:14 PM

I Voted Fo U Least U Culd Do Iz Return Da Vote Ackrite

mizz fyre 05-22-05 06:15 PM

^^^lol @ favors being returned that ain't right at all............

MyNamesGrafhYall 05-22-05 06:24 PM

Wut R U Talking About If He Votes In Any Of My Battlez I Will Do Da Same, How Else Do U Expect 2 Get Voters

MyNamesGrafhYall 05-22-05 06:24 PM

Ur A Hater Mizz Fyre

mizz fyre 05-22-05 06:27 PM

^^^lol i ain't a hater..........nope

Murdah.txt 05-22-05 07:00 PM

mizz fyre why u pickin on noobs :nono: jealous


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