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Paranoid 05-23-05 12:18 AM

White Flag
 
White Flag

Why it all happened..
An 23 year old man, disputed with an intersecting Life
Not any perfection, only graceful children and his Wife..
So frustrated, just because he wanted to earn Metals
He’d always love to attack terrorists posing as Rebels..
Finding ways to feed his family, he had gripped Reality
Life’s fatality, strong as it was, he proved his Mentality..
Killing was his profession, entering war was his Confession
The more he killed, his future would fill with Depression..

The phone call..
Spending quality time with his family, he got a serious Call
His wife yelling in sacrifice, wasn’t enough to prove he’d Fall
His children crying, bagging for him to stay, to keep his Place
Looking at pictures to see his face, almost as bad as a Disgrace
He tried calming them down, still he was hurting to be Heroic
There was no possible way of stopping his feelings to Chock it
All he wanted to do was shoot fates reality, for his Obsession
Thinking he’d be on an world mission, only so filled of Tension

Getting back at camp..
He realized, he just couldn’t idealize, it was all so Furious
Only so curious, he chose to go on but it got way to Imperious
In command of his own platoon, a lot just didn’t Understand
Why he was so fierce, he’d just patronize minds in the Land
And in hand he had the rankest weapons of mad Destruction
But he craved, only to go in battle and build on his Function
Forced to play the games of warfare, he was known as a Shame
Thinking he’ll earn and find ways, but he only felt gashing Pain
Trying to earn some fame, only he’d ponder about being Home
He thought he had a clone, strictly stuck just suffering Alone
But he was dedicated to war, fate couldn’t detected his Infection
He tried to draw himself an exact picture of his own Perfection
Eventually he lost his platoon cause of a Vietnam Flamethrower
In the back of his mind, he thought he turned into a Poser
Looking for a better life, inspired by warfare, wanting to Retire
The supposed man in command, only exposed by internal Fire

Why it all happened..
An 23 year old man, disputed with an intersecting Life
Not any perfection, only graceful children and his Wife..
So frustrated, just because he wanted to earn Metals
He’d always love to attack terrorists posing as Rebels..
Finding ways to feed his family, he had gripped Reality
Life’s fatality, strong as it was, he proved his Mentality..
Killing was his profession, entering war was his Confession
The more he killed, his future would fill with Depression..

Dramatically losing..
Back at his home base, they were getting shot Viciously
But imperiously he wasn’t sure, life was getting Seriously
His life and others were on line, trying to withdraw in Time
So noisy you couldn’t hear the drop of the loudest Dime
One of the worlds hugest crimes, with only little to Prove
But they had no choice it was to fierce, they had to Lose
And with one glance of shock, they weren’t gonna Retreat
At least not yet, having never to experiencing a hard Defeat

Getting seriously damaged..
They pushed forward, forcing an last existence of Resistance
Though the base got demolished, they needed no Assistance
No persistence, only needing aircrafts to drop atomic Bombs
Stuck in Vietnam, the creaks leaking in all the soldiers Palms
Only wanting to create screams, the children couldn’t Survive
Medics having drives to revive, wanting everyone to stay Alive
Purposely thinking curiously , trying to force the saddest Ending
That’s what the Americans were Intending, never Pretending
They’d show intensions, perfect answers for lethal Inventions
But the Vietnam soldiers fought back, with stronger Tensions..
Of power so they got back at the Americans, it all fell Apart
All he could prove was heart, only having to start to act Smart
He got tempted and full of frustration, with no sign of Perfection
No chances of interception, they had to retreat all Intensions
They waved the white flag, leaving all the dead behind Fate
The tragedy finished, only broken hearts trying to reach the Gate


Why it all happened..
An 23 year old man, disputed with an intersecting Life
Not any perfection, only graceful children and his Wife..
So frustrated, just because he wanted to earn Metals
He’d always love to attack terrorists posing as Rebels..
Finding ways to feed his family, he had gripped Reality
Life’s fatality, strong as it was, he proved his Mentality..
Killing was his profession, entering war was his Confession
The more he killed, his future would fill with Depression..

Paranoid 05-23-05 12:18 AM

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2168970

Paranoid 05-26-05 11:43 PM

come on uppin...

Kawn Flixx 05-27-05 12:16 AM

Gave you feed in rb, nice shyt

Paranoid 05-29-05 02:06 AM

thanks uppin...

Paranoid 05-30-05 01:41 AM

uppin..........

Paranoid 06-01-05 02:33 PM

uppin................

OrEo da cookie 06-01-05 03:50 PM

uppin man you suck.....
be a battler quit with this pussy ass stories...............
oh yeah you suck

Paranoid 06-12-05 11:34 PM

i do battle im like 15-1 in topical battles. in a row i usto have 12 wins tell i lost to tim on rb i'd merk you do bad ive elevated so much

anyway uppin.

Paranoid 06-16-05 11:16 PM

uppin..........

Paranoid 07-09-05 11:08 AM

oreo is wack

uppin

Texxus 07-09-05 05:59 PM

this was a ok drop from you.....vocab was put and used nicely didnt say words that are used in daily life....flow was goin well kept me readin on rythem.....structure was good...opener was a good intro and closer was not that good....in my oponion i think this was to long but it was overall pretty good...

overall-7/10

Crazy Hades 07-09-05 07:27 PM

Heh. Different than on RB, huh? Especially when you get an OM nomination then Jekyll tells us all how the same thing was dropped half a year ago.

Funny stuff.

Textcee Bob 07-09-05 10:23 PM

dude GIVE UP !!!!!

ITS OVER 3 MONTHS OLD !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

ROAR.

anywho. i didnt like it, very simplistic, and it didnt have any originality.....I think you need creativity as well, your writings are very boring mang, just keep trying and hopefully youll elevate nicely....................But stop Upping this thread you hoe cake

Jeez

Paranoid 07-24-05 05:39 PM

uppin what are you gonna do about it, i'd like to get better n better feed of ways to get bigger even if this is like 3 monthes old:)


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