blackfrostbite vs VISION
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VISION has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-14-05 07:07 PM.
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blackfrostbite has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-14-05 08:12 PM.
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yo quit tryin to be Raven,you can't see in da future/
'member Ray Charles and Stevie are ya muses/ haha,dis amuses me,lol,you make me laugh/ i can see ahead of time though when i hit da blunt to fast/ yo head to da doc,have ya eyes checked out/ cuz i want you to be able to read da bars im tossin out/ ouch!dat right must be like a stab to ya eye/ in ya sig,dat skull resembles ya face,its in ya eye/ dis is so obvisous,anyone could see it/ how you gone have a name like vision,but ya loss you couldn't see it/ i know you see dat!!!! lol holla |
You've got the wrong kind of RIME/Rhyme
and now you're Frozen in time, but that heat that VISION speaks will defrost you're behind. You stumbled across a lyrical boss mr.frost, or should i say frosty u softy, take a loss. This wanna b stepped in front of me, now it's slushies on the house. he ain't talkin no more. I put a lid on his mouth. With this sick,twisted,verbalistic rhyming device. think twice, i'm precise and you're slippin on ice. YELLOW SNOW is you're name bi$#% |
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Voted For: VISION
yo quit tryin to be Raven,you can't see in da future/ 'member Ray Charles and Stevie are ya muses/ UM...OK I GUESS haha,dis amuses me,lol,you make me laugh/ i can see ahead of time though when i hit da blunt to fast/ IS THIS A PUNCH? yo head to da doc,have ya eyes checked out/ cuz i want you to be able to read da bars im tossin out/ OK ouch!dat right must be like a stab to ya eye/ in ya sig,dat skull resembles ya face,its in ya eye/ TRYING dis is so obvisous,anyone could see it/ how you gone have a name like vision,but ya loss you couldn't see it/ OK...WELL NOT REALLY...EHH BREAKDOWN-VERE WASN'T GOOD AT ALL...YOU ARE SUPPOSED TO ELEVATE THE MORE THAT YOU ARE ON THE WEBSITE...IT SEEMS LIKE YOU HAVE DECLINED...YOUR VOCAB ISN'T GOOD AT ALL...AND YOUR PUNCHES AREN'T HIITIN AT ALL...YOUR PERSONALS ALSO ARE LOST IN THE OBLIVIAN SKY...YOU MIGHT NEED TO TRY'N INCORPORATE THEM INTO YOUR VERSE You've got the wrong kind of RIME/Rhyme and now you're Frozen in time, OK...I GUESS but that heat that VISION speaks will defrost you're behind. THAT IS THE WRONG YOU'RE...BUT STILL...PUNCH WAS EHH You stumbled across a lyrical boss mr.frost, or should i say frosty u softy, take a loss. OK.. This wanna b stepped in front of me, now it's slushies on the house. HAHA...FUNNI he ain't talkin no more. I put a lid on his mouth. OK With this sick,twisted,verbalistic rhyming device. think twice, i'm precise and you're slippin on ice. OK I LIKE DA VOCAB USAGE YELLOW SNOW is you're name bi$#% THAT IS JUST WRONG...HAHA BREAKDOWN-THIS VERSE WAS ALOT BETTA THEN WHAT YOU ARE KNOWN TO PRODUCE...YOU HAD A COUPLE OF PUNCHES IN THERE THAT I COULD DEAL WIT...BUT YOU SHOULD MAYBE TRY'NN READ SOME OF THOSE PEEPS IN ELEVATED LINES TO TRY'N GET SOME TIPS ON WORDPLAY AND SHIT LIKE DAT...BUT BATTLE OVERAL WASN'T GOOD AT ALL...BUT OK VERSE...PEACE |
nice feedback yo good critique.
much appreciated ........................... |
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Voted For: VISION
I vote for Vision structure was tight nice play on words and the punches kept on Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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Voted For: VISION
straight up da winner rtf and vote on my battles :) Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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