Black Dragon - Race Card (I'll RTF!!!!)
 

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=235928
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=235798
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My latest track.........yea u can tell what i'm talkin bout by tha title hope ya'll like it...any feedback will be returned and is 'preciated........

www.myspace.com/blackdragonsic
^^ Click "Race Card"
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http://www.soundclick.com/bands/son...&songID=4554480
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beat beginning isnt my type so far but whoa definately took another turn ...lol quality is a lil off but we all been there at one point or another...your attempt is good at the hook but to much and not really sure if it was at first im feeling ya message but got a lil lost in ya flow dragon sometimes ya flow pauses to make words fit are over the top get a lil more comfortable with ya words overall i liked it man holla at me we can fux with some shit

yea man 'preciate da feedback......i'm down for a collab......your feedback is returned by the way...

^^^^^^^^^^^^ cuz i been leavin mad feed dun sleep RV it's a hot track.........at least i hope so........

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^for my final time..................

aiight peeping

what's hot:
lyrics- i actually liked them a lot good shit

what's coo:
beat-got unique feel to it but, it's coo in a way. lol
quality- could be better, but you gotta do with what you got nah mean?
delivery, emotion, flow- for most part they were on point man. few parts tho, some parts sounded forced. So work on that

what's not:
nothing really

overall, not bad man. best shit i heard from you. You getting better with each track good shit. keep it up man. 8.5/10

EZ

listening


huh?...wtf ashanti beat?...lol gatta hear this!



...you got a cool delivery...

...your presence is on point

.....nice vocals!...

good mixing...


...volume is right,


.....lyrics are alright nothing bad


...your flow wwud have been doper if only u reduced some syllabs on ur lyrics cos u were rushing ur words at many spots and took off ur flow several times...i think u shud like give a closer ear to ur flows,take note of where u rushed ur words and shorten them...u had a dope idea on this tho...i was feeling it!


hit my sig thanx...feat tony brown

ya feedback is returned............

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Does no one else realize this is Astanti's- Only U beat lmao some people blind anywayz bac 2 tha song

Straight up fire ya flow waz on point, i love tha concept, i feel tha same since im white, anywayz dope track!!! We should collab sometyme!

www.soundclick.com/trillproductions

'preciate da feedback...........and ur feedback is returned by the way............

Iight listening

You kinda came in awkward but once the beat drops your on point...

Flow is straight for like 95% of the time but there's a few spots during your verses it seems like you speed up some of words to fit em in, just something I noticed... do it myself lol

Emotion is dope... sound sincere

Lyrically the first 2 verses we're better than the final verse IMO the last verse was mad basic

Coo lil track bro

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=236641

'preciate da feedback man........and i already hit ya link up..............

ok ok.....beat is coo....im feelin this....its more for the emotional focus

u stayed on topic.....thats whats up
flow and emotion was ur key aspects that stood out the most to me..... didnt sound like u were strugglin......so it sounded easy......emotion was good in pretty much all the places

now...lyrically it didnt strike me hard as far as lines.....but the concept overall was coo..... feelin it....def hip hop...got a good voice and good mic presence