Poetic <3 LatinKitten
 

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=248561


true love son...true love

wow, haha like the number 11 that was great like a comedy type love letter, the last line was almost a insult, I saw some of picasos paintings there fucked up.

rofl

stand tall togeahter like the number 11

do I sense Jealousy Cola?

son write me a fuckin poem, i need a good laugh

well it would help if you knew how to spell right!

i'd make fun of your lame ass, but you'd prob. start poppin perk's you fuckin pussy

it'd help if you grew a pair of nuts, pussy

cus Carla even picaso cant paint this good of a masterpiece.



rofl


good spelling, dumb ass

Well when i do since u and your gay lover wanna see my dick in a video would u like to see them? rofl

wow, pathetic man...you can't even come up with something negative to say about anybody, becuase your that much of a pussy

you are the defention of a pussy man, a huge cum filled pussy

haha.

I dont even fucking try dude and ur still getting butthurt.

Ur just mad cus im gettin more action than u are.

Pm'ing my girl askin if were actually dating. and why shes dating me. ROOOOOOOOOOOFFFFFLLLLLLL

Jealousy?

I think so.

actually that was adam,n he asked me in a thread not in a pm

the type of girl I need to succeed your the girl I Envy.
First off, you don't envy somebody you love. I can also tell you used a thesaurus for this word because it's capitalized from copy and paste and you don't know what it means.
internally I bleed calling out your name in silent screams.
This is just emo and you can't call somebody's name out in silent screams, try using the word try or attempt.
your gorgeous looks are as pleasent as heaven.
You have no idea what heaven is like, basically you're saying her gorgeous looks are as pleasant (which you spelled wrong) as an imaginary place.
you and I can stand tall together like the number eleven.
This is probably the dumbest fucking simile I've ever seen in a poetic piece about love.
your eyes hypnotize mine from the looks they give onto mine.
You've never seen her in real life, so don't write fake bullshit.
lost in thought inside heavenly skies divine with no time.
You've placed divine in the wrong spot. Nice attempt though on this one, seriously.
picture it you and I together we fly holdin hands in gods sky.
It would be God's sky, with a capital. This is also childish and fucking stupid.
the perfect mixture me and you paint a perfect picture.
Played out.
ill treat you good like you need to be like a gorgeous queen.
Like, like, like... poor writing.
together we can rule the world you and me and i can be your king.
If you're ruling it together, why would you be her king?
cus Carla even picaso cant paint this good of a masterpiece.
Picasso didn't paint masterpieces, people dug his style because it was abstract.

All in all, this was fucking terrible.

1/10 for one half decent attempt at a good line.

Wow, I haven't seen someone give feedback on anything on this site in years.