[7] Evolve vs [10] Bribeone1
 

Alrite, The Tourney You've Been Waiting For
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Topic The End :rolleyes:

Checkin In.....in...in...n....n.......n

Im In.

....THE END....

what if........
It comes Masked hiding the face of Racism...
were just......
people counting time like we locked behing prison....

Takin a Trip two days before the end

Convicted Murderer on Death Row awaiting execution
Feed My Face.. Deface me... Grace me with a Final Wish::..
Like Nas said .Im bout to get Divorced..man this lifes a Bitch::..
Walking a Deadlier Line Than a netless traipese::.
Hope Im allowed in the Gates Ive Been weeks on my Knees::..
22 no wife no Kids and a Single Mother::..
What would my kids have looked like?....why did I even Bother::...
To Kill a man for The sake Of Pride::..
He Offended me ... i tried to Hold My Finger please beleive me I tried::..
The Gun Spoke and His Actions were truly louder than his words::..
God I truly wish u come answer when i come Knockin on the Doors::..

AIDS patient knowing His time is Due
Its Just for Gays,Drug addicts man I was confused::..
but why did u choose me when i came to get my Blood Transfused::..
whats the reason to breath when i have a disease thats killing me::.
Fuk Life fuk the world...... if these are the cards its dealing me::..
My kids what will they say when asked how their father died::..
will they understand?..man theyre only 10 and 9::..
My wife ...sorry for leavin you Hanging witt no support::.
but this pain i truly cant take no more.................................

Soldier in Enemy Territory...alone
College funds early retirement are what they promised::...
but after this to my family ill be truly Missed::..
few rounds left ive completly lost my back up::..
its funny....I used to say I rep...just to say that I was Tuff::.
now alone im sure they want a yankee for a trophy head::
i sign this one quick or else Truly I-Will-B-Dead::
.................Xsgt:Monroe......................

Humanity after our damage has taken effect
Brand New Cars always lookin for the Newest Gadget ::
Depleted Ozone un-Breatheable air...why?...there u Have It ::
deforestation,overpopulation equals a cluttered civilisation ::
why did we let ourselves cause this devastation ::
Like an old computer we have used up all our resources ::
no more oil,cole we have also emptied out the sources ::
wars took toll and did unrepairable damage ::
we once had nothing and how did they manage? ::


The End

quick shit... sorry i was late, been busy so i rushed this
i didnt want to no show....let me know if it counts......

this has been fun, me & mom really have a connection
its almost like we are one, afflicted by loves infection
this was so unexpected, i never would have guessed it
in the beggining, she neglected me all the time
our relationship was tested, but now everything is fine
we would eat, id make a suggestion & continue to remind
until she agreed, ingested & then i ate mine
she is so kind, would jump at my every whim
the only thing i couldnt control was her love for him
attracted to sin & he was full of it
that, along w/ all the bullshit & the way he was pullin it
we were doing so good, until he came to ruin it.. he
spoke that soppy sweet talk way too fluently
fuck him... who is he, to come & take whats not his
who does he think he is!!.. she loves me, im her kid
but she couldn't stop as she slid into the situation we're in
now theirs no replacing him, she 's in a bid & on lock down
its not gonna stop now, my life is basically done
as he beats her, darkness falls over this son
lifts his size twelves & delves into her stomach for fun
stomping my chances as my heart beat goes to none
the countdown started... three.. two... one...........
the beggining of The End, it was over before i begun.....

Waiting on Votes!!!

props to both textees........good battle......but i only can choose
one....evolve.....i liked urs....it was straight....but i'm not gonna
be like these other cats who say.."i seen evolve come way iller
than this"......fuck that bullshit......i'll come real.....i liked urs....but
i was FEELING bribes more......the way he switched it to all those
different characters.......that was nice....his vocab was on point
too......theres no negativity to point out.....all i can do is say....my
vote goes to bribe........good luck to u both tho...this is only one
vote.......1

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...?threadid=63491

I really didn't want to vote on this one. It was very close, and very good. I usually don't take to having a topic broken up into micro-stories, but Bribeone's stayed on well. I felt his was very "powerful". I'm always partial to heartfelt, sobering tales, but this time Bribeone's concept just took me over for whatever reason.

Lines like:

wars took toll and did unrepairable damage ::
we once had nothing and how did they manage? ::

Won it.

Everyone else has such good closers, what's the matter with me?

Aight ... Comments are appreciated... Nice verse bribe

2-0 Bribe

This Was Another Great Topical Battle...Evolve Had A Very Nice Verse And Used Good Imagery In It...But Damn...Bribeone Came Out Very Nice In This Battle...Imagery And Vocab Were Ill...The Way Ya Twisted Ya Stories Was Dope...Liked Reading Them Both But I Like Bribeone's More...
Props And Respect To Both...

Vote - Bribeone

3-0.....my way .. thanks for the votes and comments...

Evolve good battle man.......... ........

hmmm...this is tough decision

Bribe: Your verse told a lot of stories, and every story had a lot of nice wordplay. I was really feelin every verse. My favourite was the soldier, because it seemed the realest. I disliked the Nas line in one of the verses, can't remember which it was in.

Evolve: Your story was strange. I could envision the beatings, which is unusual in abuse pieces because they're usually too emotional for good imagery. Maybe it's because I just watched a lot of violent movies lol. Well, you had some nice wordplay, and I liked how it was a son-mother relationship at the beginning. Very Nice.

vote-Evolve.
I was just feelin his verse more, and he seemed to have every aspect in there. Dope verses though, bribe.
Peace

Bribeone1: Like I tell everybody that chooses to write coming from different angles, I recommend coming from one (but that's probably because that's how I write! :\) Anyway, you put together a good piece, but I'm sure you can do better. The AIDS section was the most vividly-explained part, in my opinion.

Evolve: Imagery, imagery, imagery. Your ending decided the fate of my vote, but Bribe was right behind you. .



Absolutely (insert cool adjective here).

VOTE: Evolve

3-2 pretty close ........... once again thanks for the votes..

Aight.

This was tough but overall I think that Bribeone1 came harder. Hard as hell.

Nice Vocab
Flow and everything else.
He rode the topic alot better.

Vote:Bribeone1

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