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The Remix Vs Fed Ex (right one)
Rules:
No d/r, crew, or hate votes 10-15 lines You spit first show me whatchu got -1- |
this shits gonna b tyte... b bak wen both of ya'll drop... here.. vote here... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=74952
... i'll return the favor |
yo, you called me out, you drop first!................. aight.......................,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, ,
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i stated the rules and you can't change em'............ JUST SPIT i'll work on mine now so it won't be long after you drop
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FUCK IT here's my verse.....you can't top this
...:::Givin' him a chance:::... Your about to be "shipped" and "handled" as your girls say your "package" is sealed wit "fragile"// (pronounced FRA-JILE) Fed Ex is bout to be "ex"ecuted and tube "fed" these lyrical "stamps" that'll "send" u "packin" in denial// You wanna battle me? you must be a "blood-donor", you lubricatin' wit soap just so u can be "hard and clean" but u just got a "sud-boner"// I'm Lyrically Intriguing and i'ma pull that lyrical trigga, You just a newbie wanted a battle wit a tru killa// I'm just as "white" as "Michael Jackson" call me the "thrilla", ya spit soft while mine is "sweet n low" as if my lyrics were dipped in "vanilla"// ...:::Takin' away his chance:::... You pm me askin' me how you change your name, probably cuz you know after you battle me you'll need an identity change// Bullets of wordplay shootin' off and pounding-ya-chest, lyrical pistols dancin' around you and surrounding-the-rest// Lyrical Uzis glistening ya eyes givin' em' a-twinkle, Your "Fed Ex" truck is about to hit a-"sink-hole"// Ya lyrics are so "old" they gettin' "wrinkles", I'm strapped wit a gat and "once i pop" i just don't stop like "pringles"// ...:::Finisher:::... I'm about to murder ya played out business like i was UPS, shit like a "child" you better get to cleanin' up ya "mess"// Like Superman only i'ma have a W on my chest, After you hit that L you'll want a record change too i guess// Now ending this shit allow me to give you some educated advice, The next time you challenge me you'll be LITERALLY SLICED// You got shipped and handled Fed Ex......haha |
Uhhh....well i'm waitin for tha guy ta drop but i'll go ahead and evaluate this shit...
FUCK IT here's my verse.....you can't top this ...:::Givin' him a chance:::... Your about to be "shipped" and "handled" as your girls say your "package" is sealed wit "fragile"// (pronounced FRA-JILE) Fed Ex is bout to be "ex"ecuted and tube "fed" these lyrical "stamps" that'll "send" u "packin" in denial// You wanna battle me? you must be a "blood-donor", you lubricatin' wit soap just so u can be "hard and clean" but u just got a "sud-boner"// I'm Lyrically Intriguing and i'ma pull that lyrical trigga, You just a newbie wanted a battle wit a tru killa// I'm just as "white" as "Michael Jackson" call me the "thrilla", ya spit soft while mine is "sweet n low" as if my lyrics were dipped in "vanilla"// ...:::Takin' away his chance:::... You pm me askin' me how you change your name, probably cuz you know after you battle me you'll need an identity change// Bullets of wordplay shootin' off and pounding-ya-chest, lyrical pistols dancin' around you and surrounding-the-rest// Lyrical Uzis glistening ya eyes givin' em' a-twinkle, Your "Fed Ex" truck is about to hit a-"sink-hole"// Ya lyrics are so "old" they gettin' "wrinkles", I'm strapped wit a gat and "once i pop" i just don't stop like "pringles"// ...:::Finisher:::... I'm about to murder ya played out business like i was UPS, shit like a "child" you better get to cleanin' up ya "mess"// Like Superman only i'ma have a W on my chest, After you hit that L you'll want a record change too i guess// Now ending this shit allow me to give you some educated advice, The next time you challenge me you'll be LITERALLY SLICED// ^that wasn't a good finisher and ya shit had no floh,.....i seen better shit from u mayne... *no hate strickly feedback* Now NewB' Common |
nah man i appreciate the feedback....i knew this cat was new so i went easy on him...... it took my 6 mins and 27 seconds i timed it......then i added the shit to make it more readable........but yeah i went reallllll easy on this cat.......DEADLINE is 9:00 p.m. Eastern Time
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let's go noob...................................uppin for his verse..................................
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YO GUY FUCK , GIMME A CHANCE TO POST MY VERSE!! I CANT POST TODAY MAN FUCK, I'M POSTING TOMORROW BECAUSE I CANT USE THE PC FOR LONG HERE, TOOK ME 1 MIN TO WRITE DIS, AND I GOTTA GO NOW, BE UP 2MORROW, SORRY
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what the fuck? give u time to write it? i fuckin' made this at like 2:00 today and told u to hurry up at 5:00 and set the deadline for 9:00 and your saying you had no time? damn man fuckin' pre-written shit.......I guess i can wait till tommorow to merk you....haha j/p no beef don't worry bout it man just get it up when u can
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WTF!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! come on man!!!! it's been 24 hours now...........deadline is 6:00 tonight eastern or no show votes will start
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you jus "a different version" of a faggot, u the remix/
only this U do more than lose to me is suck dicks,how the fuck do you get yourself into these conflicts?// You bout to get slain, I'll serve your head to you on a platter/ When I Look for a battle, all opponents scatter,You scared of me? what the matter? I know I'm makin your heart go pitter and patter// Wouldnt it be a shame if you lose to this newbie?/ you prolly this you got an easy win, I'll have to dissagree,there's one this funny on this site, its you caliming to be an emcee// Get off people's dicks, thats why you have alot of KO's/ only pre-written, bittin, verses you compose, you winning this battle is the chance of you seeing UFO's// I had to write this shit fast as I can, but Its good enough to beat you/ if you get any votes, you know they untrue,an honest win you still have to pursue// (pursue part=you still havent gotten an honest win) Your lines are fucked up, you still need to learn to flow/ for you to win, nigga you need to grow, sucking dick is what you really know// You gettin fucked up, needed to tell it to ya face/ people are witnessing the beat-down of you taking place, murdering you, dont worry nigga, I wont leave a trace// Aite man fuck, there you happy?!?! fuck, I still wudnt have written it yet cus I'm still busy as fuck, so man, get the fuckin votes down herre, fuck I gotta goo!!! |
I like the remix even though i dont have enough to post i have to say that remix handled himself well in battle but fedex did also you just need to stay on candence a lil more than you will be on poit be cuz you have good word choice
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Fed Ex ur shit
Remix Your opener was better than ur finisher nice spit, what group are u in? if u in one hit up my free agent thread ok dawg peace, please hit this up too http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=75211 |
remix but this wasnt a challenge newb start off slow b4 u go up against heavy or midds. butt u came pretty hard 2
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