I fucking miss you
 

I fucking miss you, and theres no words to explain it
When im tryin ta get you off my mind, thats when the pain hits
Like a full on blitz, and im too bull-headed to admit
That my world has gone to shit, ever since our lives split
I dont know if i can make it, I feel dazed and confused
Now I gotta smoke a blunt just so i can steady my views
You can put yourself in my shoes, but you cant get inside my head
You could never feel my emotions, or taste the tears that ive shed
Or the witness pain that ive bled, my love is like an open wound
My soul is missing a string, the melody of my life is out of tune
But still i sing to myself, its the only way to escape my mind
In a sky full of dullen nickels, you were a dime that shined
*Zoom zip*, lets rewind, to the very first time we kissed
Love didnt yet exist, and it was one of the MANY firsts on your list
I was privelaged, enough, to be the man to take your flower
But leave it to me to take the sweetness of this virgin, and make it sour
I feel dirty still after showers, cause ive been digging myself a hole
Im so far down I cant go back, I know nobody, not even my soul
Its out of my controll, the pomegranite is too far from my reach
Now the only thing i get my hands on, is the more common peach
And it can never be enough, no matter how sweet the fruit
I will hate myself forever, its a never ending self dispute
My mind cant compute, what i was thinking when i hurt you
I broke the only promise i ever made, and that was to stay true
If i cant even do that, how could i ever trust myself again
I cant even stand the stench of myself, because im sucha rotton person
I seem to make things worsen, when im just trying to move on
You know every step i make, I'm walking on white carpet with shoes on
And every time i take a step, I want to trace my prints back to you
But like a cake at a birthday party, by everybody ive been cut into
And been cut in two, cause you and me together, we were a whole
But for the last two months together, i could hear the drumroll
I knew it was gonna happen, it was inevitable
By writing and admitting all this, i have swollowed my pride whole
Im not usually emotional, but thinking of you brings a tear to my eye
I know were not together, but i couldnt handle you with another guy
Even though im with another girl, i know that my words now sound selfish
But if i had a magic genie right now, you would be my only wish


This is what happened.... how i broke the only promise i made to her

sorry... just had to get some shit off my chest... so any feedback would help alot... thanks

Congrats On The OM...
Im Sorry For Ur Loss..Im AIMing U Now..So...DUCK NIGGA!!

thats deep man, i dont know what to say, that should tell you how good that verse is.

thanks.... anyone??? plz dont sleep on this

A lot of emotion you've given on this one. It's funny how life goes huh?...you would just beginning to appreciate something when its already out of your hand. Its like having a piece of cake on the palm of your hand and then all of a sudden someone bumped into you and it fell right on the floor...you may think about the whole 5-second rule but you couldnt keep up with it and no matter how much youve tried to get it back the same as before it was given to you...the only destination of that fallen cake is either the trash or for your dog to eat. Then you would think how did it happen..was it the person who bumped into you that made you lost that cake or was it you.. cuz you didnt hang on it with full care?..or maybe you couldve use your 2 hands to support it well so it wouldnt go to waste? Think about it.

Well, regarding to your piece. It was merely a simple personal verse that was executed through emotions. The reality of those kind of situations would really make you realize how to appreciate something while you still have it.

"My soul is missing a string, the melody of my life is out of tune
But still i sing to myself, its the only way to escape my mind"

These lines were very strong that made the whole thing brilliant. I am very emotional when it comes to these kinds of terms. Just made me think of something about my life ..and music and rythms are one of them..just how you compiled words makes it different from any other lines from your verse.


It was worth reading it.

thanks shiz... i like when people accually read my shit and see that i dont have alot of complexity, but i do have alot of emotion... all my open mics come from things that are happening in my life... thanks... upiin

werd....this shit was mad deep. I feel yah pain tho son, ive been through the same type of shit be4 and shit still be hurtin. All you can do is keep doin yah thang and stay up nah mean.......but anyways this shit was hot, nice story vibe to it. I was mos def feel'n it.......


Plus you cant be all that sad......you said you fucked like 8 bitchs in the limo this weekend hahaha......shit you doin aiight son, 1

i know i know... but i still have feelings you know lol

^^^^Tru tru, i feel you son......and yo by the way...I moved to San Fran son bout a month ago from Brooklyn


...uppin this shit 4 yah

thanks man... i was just drunk and depressed last night... so this is what came out... i trailed off in the end tho cause i started to pass out lol

gues whos herrre.....were u waiting for me ?

welll first..she is pretti cute....

anywayz
very nice verse..i understand what ur feeling although i have neva been throgh this..it gets strtaight to the point of how much u miss here..and cuz of our little talk on AIM i really get everything ur saying...very good shit ur getting very good so keep dropping and hope everything goes good for ya Ill..

Pz..hit mine up

upperz

I Miss You Too!

Ill Mental... I know we on the best of terms dawg... but this
peice made me see ya from another point of view...

feedback-
this was a VERY emotional peice, your skills shined in this...
you took what you was feeling and put into words... its hard
enough to do it without emotion, but to put both together
like this, creates a masterpeice....
I am goin through the same shit dawg... (pretty much)
I'm sorry bout you loss dawgy... but if its makin you write like
this... maybe its a good thing... like God put you through this to
let out that emotion... to release all the lyrical skills you have to
create something this good... MAD PROPS dawg... MAD PROPS...
just keep doin what your doin... and uh, best of luck to you and
her dawg... you never know where life will lead you... but you do
know that you have to always look forward and keep you head up.
~AshY~