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west 12-11-03 05:40 PM

Fears - West ft. Edicius
 
Fears - Quik Ass Drop Trus Me Lol

West.

As a brit that's witnessed a war been left with a scar
can't even see anymore nevermind lookin at the stars
imagine writin bars and picturin tha world from afar
people trapped behind them coz wot nationality they are
and it's so fucked up like young girls gettin knocked up
missin a period now pregnant and the father is locked up
can't even read but willin and takin money to cock suck
these poor little teens never had nuthin just bad luck

Edicius.

Looking in the mirror it doesn't look back,interior pain,u know i aint flying
Wasting time,tasting fine,and pain iside,i'm dieng outside im crying
Why did i start this I'm stuck doomed everything i do is fucked up
So now's its over,my minds state's like blow her and still im stuck
Watching the sky,touching her eye,looking up,when feeling down
The circus has left,this was the last theft,still i remain as a clown
I state the fact the fact was stated but myself respect wasnt created
Only minimalized to zero tho i aint a hero im a pawn and i remain insulated
And Confusin moments filled with refusing dorment treatments,towards me
Locked me up in my own mind,this small town kind of stoppin me from bein free

West.

And so hurtful to say that we're not responsible today
treatin people in the wrong way not listenin to there say
shit i pray askin the lord to heal and take hurt away
but he's dismayed with the lack of love that we display
to each other mary as our mother but we're no brothers
theres no respect in this world got me feelin smothered
i've discovered plenty of past ghosts like the others
so scary that at night i sleep with head under covers

Links -

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...0336#post980336

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...0362#post980362

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97980

Mr.Christensen 12-11-03 05:44 PM

west.. this is the 1st iv read from you...
the imagry was there, but i think you could have expanded on your lines... both verse got to the point, but i think they could have been about 4-6 longer with an expand on the imagry...besides that it was good

Ed...
umm, why were you streatching like that...i know you can cut lines shorter than that... makes you out of breath to get threw that...the last 3 lines went so far that they threw the flow off

good job gents, and take my advice how you want

check the sig

west 12-11-03 05:47 PM

Fair Enuff man,all feed appreciated.

Peace

SPEC-tacular 12-11-03 05:50 PM

it was ok flow was ight wordplay ok vocab ight meta's ok
over all 6.5/10

Edicius 12-11-03 05:51 PM

^What !

Did u read?..lol^ i didnt stretch ne thing

Up^

west 12-11-03 05:53 PM

Yo he said to extend mine by 4-6,that woulda made my bars longer than yours,and he said yours were stretched lol ahh well.

Peace

Mr.Christensen 12-11-03 05:56 PM

4-6 lines...not syllabuls

:( nevermind my advice is wrong

deacon 12-11-03 05:57 PM

Nice pieces guys....edicius i liked your verse..some people write differently not bad at all..Um yeah im a nice guy so i hit this up with skill...blah blah....keep writing and i'll keep reading even though im blind..

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Edicius 12-11-03 05:58 PM

^lol

rule 12-11-03 06:02 PM

this was a good collabo, i liked how the first to verrses seemed a lot a like which was good, west had some really good lines but so did ed, for a quick drop this was good keep it up pz

west 12-11-03 06:02 PM

Quote:
Originally posted by The Realist
4-6 lines...not syllabuls


Oh ok dawg,all feed is welcome.

Peace

Theo Ginn 12-11-03 06:10 PM

West...

wheneva i read your shit...i cant help readin it with a scotish accent in my head...lol fucks it up a lil...but was fellin your lines...flows on point..topic and structure is there...nice verses

Dutch...

You had the dopest lines in this collabo...but your structure is a lil fucked...just cud do wit tidyin up a lil to make your verse look nicer..lol...but it aint stretched..didnt throw off the flow...dunno where TR is commin from :|...came with a tight verse..liek i said...good shit...deep yada yada yada...lol open mics aint my thing :)

Best Lines:


As a brit that's witnessed a war been left with a scar
can't even see anymore nevermind lookin at the stars
imagine writin bars and picturin tha world from afar
people trapped behind them coz wot nationality they are

dope...

I state the fact the fact was stated but myself respect wasnt created
Only minimalized to zero tho i aint a hero im a pawn and i remain insulated

pure dope

props...vote on my battle with amend in elevated frontlines.

bye

Edicius 12-11-03 06:28 PM

Multi's
Inners

Hello...

^Thnx origin = )

west 12-11-03 09:57 PM

Uppin.

west 12-12-03 09:51 AM

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