Basically you ripped a line from just three posts below yours..
Incorporated better vocab... then hoped for vets applause..
Like bad T.V.. you've got the flow all wrong..
Doing this shit..
......... After the break the viewers interest is gone..
Scrap the presentation? Like bees ya verse is dead after one-sting..
'Ironically'.. like ya name... it seems ya tryna prove somethin'..

talking bout flow... shit, i dont understand
looking at your hand... think your reach has over-spanned
is ya verse planned... if it is then ya want shot
cos hot its not... ya could freeze flames with the skill ya got
if thats harlem's finest... then whats the fucks the worst
they couldnt cum any deader... if they were fucking in a hurse

Interest..Finest in 1 sentence..must be reversed words..
Ur tryna prove somethin to..just to be one of the herbs..
Kid has the creativity..of a deadmind..with a token brain..
Newport & Harlem's Finest...
..A white kid gettin a 'L'..well thats still hardly the same..
Been' here since Oct. still I hold more victories then you..
..Kid battle'd newbies..still got beat once...times two..
I could go on..& on.. clownin this funny kid named phill..
............. But i guess if i dont do it..his own cyphers will..

This might be Dev' from Coronation Street.. constantly talkin' shit..
Kid, the 'hurse' line, Harlem's 'Finest' -- Played... you call that wit?..
It's strangely surreal.. eight to three with those wack punches..
Freezin' flames? Heard that more times than eatin' Sunday lunches..
Ya twenty-three son.. Wack.. I guess you missed ya chance at Harvard..
Obvious really... ya vocab, thought levels... all sub-standard..

Why’d ya bother come back… I gave you the opportunity
Now I had to read… the weak lines you thru at me
But they make me laugh… how can someone be so whack
Ya rep Harlem is that fact… after seeing ya shit, they wont want ya back
Ya skill lacks… like the impudent try’na climax
Cos only 1 time when you hit… that’s whacking dick in the bath…

Again with uneven bars..same old content & stupidity..
Callin' ppl wack while your record displays eight to three..
Been here a while..still u have accomplished..fairly..shit..
...........I mean you even where unsuccesfull at d/r Chrit..
Be honest..listen to the mirror & do what ur heart says..
..But ur mirror was mean..& asked..
Where u born this ugly..or did u fall victim to a car crash..
England or w/e..ur still nowhere near Cam..needles to say..
Cause its obvious ur wack..
.........Its certain like the background of posts..will be grey..

Dev..
'Now I had to read..' dumb.. thats first and last tense..
Impo.tent maybe?... shit.. twenty-three with no common sense..
While Ace compares records.. simple.. it gets shit complicated..
Six up for many days.. still ain't stepped foot in elevated..
Is it any wonder basic front lines is the only place you get votes..
When the most productive line you've dropped... is a dictionary quote..

Bold ur words it dont matter..in Elevated ur acces denied..
Took u 10 mins to write that.. 04:11 - 04:21
............................... Now thats truely worth a highlight..
^ observe these dots..as they play part in your defeat..
& while im set to attack mode..
..........................u went to User CP..& set urs to retreat..
Kid should stop..cypherin'...or basically battlin' as whole..
Wales is a wasteland..So let me introduce Birth Control..
Direct..no fancy stuff....you now know what i mean..
Ill get on a british trip........... & mark you as "seen"..

fuck.. again...for harlem

first off its present tense and past tense... are you a full shilling
and im not a battler... im open, got more skill for jus idol winning
anyone can battle noobs... to gain a victory
its clear as day... other wise where would you be
ya bold ya words, why?... so people can tell ya tried
but it doesnt apply... cos a cripple could beat you with 1 arm tied

Ouch.. ya first bars a contradiction.. you highlighted the time..
Whereas it took you longer overall.. to drop a weaker rhyme..
I'm five wins up kiddo... again yours bars have lost effect..
'Cos elevated is open.. but unlike you........ I'll face vets..
Followed the dots implied.. they showed thoughts from a dome..
User CP? Retreat? Disses?? Man... ya in a world of ya own..

man Tolerant Level is aleady 0-3
man i think you should give RB.com
boy just go home and start smokin your bong
& stop fuckin mom wit your little 1/2 inch dong
dog cause that is just wrong
this is the end of my thread
so nigga go to bed b4 i shot your ass dead

Dev..

'First off..' I highlighted two words kid.. to show that ya wack..
I'm facing Ace.. you drop... I swat ya shit like fly attacks..
Hmm... I've got a feelin' you've dropped ya custom text..
'Cos otherwise... how'd you talk such shit whilst stayin vexxed..
I've now caned three verse's of yours son... it ain't hard..
Battle someone of ya calibre... look above... battle Retard..

why ya wanna beef... when ya give it like mutton
dressed as lamb... the only contradiction is, you says you can
when ya clearly cant... i might be in a world of my own
but where are you... under level, like the plague at waterloo
but you dont do damage... ya couldnt hurt your own
ya skillz get over thrown... by anyone with arms and... backbone

Thanks for the breakdown on my Open Mic, much respect...
But ya fucked up and walked inta Cypher, the weaker sex.
Just a bitch facin a man, and you ain't even close to Laila Ali...
My fists gonna be arrested, cuz they're going on a killing spree.
Smack Dev around too much, have his heart sieze right up...
The brain damage didn't bother him, his mind was already fucked.

Born will die a horribal death.. make him dwell in hells pit
Lie in there forever.. well.. atleast as long as ya loss list
Merking 8 to 5? With this economy?C/mon your unemployed
Your attax ain't worth shit.. they were sent back as a void
Punches are decoys.. like a real emcee.. living in Houston
Gave enough slack to hang yaself now you'll never be loosened