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DV whats the AI P/W

Yeah i did leave the site =\

but cheaaa im back now so whats good

he's back....damn cool.

lmfao

<--I remember when i was in this crew.

But uh

The RB A.I>Ya'll niggaz

believe it.

am I good enough?

so Dv that verse in a topical that i pm'ed u is it good enough or what cus i slowly elavation and need a good crew to help me elavate fast

My A.I Tryout

A sense of anxiousness in every breath.
dreary visions as I watch my footsteps.
possessd pausing in stance gaze at her house address.
Knocking on her door patiently waiting for a answer.
She opened up to find out shes a belly dancer.
walking beside me is a beautiful girl askin questions.
lost for words with no expressions and embarrassing impressions.
hearts racing fast feels like a formula 1 race pulling tons.
She winks at me and laughs and her smiles as good as the sun.
Finally we enter the restraunt obliged tried telling jokes an I almost cried.
Couldn’t make up my mind to be embarrassed or to run and hide.
No appetite and I havn’t ate a single meal in hours.
Reached in my jacket to pull out a bouquet of flowers.
Something in me seemed to seize
I blink a couple times and I can finally see
Now that im talking I feel I cant quit never leavin I wont make it
Walkin lonely now and I cant face the truth to brace it.
Goin home no one to love on or hug
an even no one for me to give back rubs.
Only to wake up and see shes lying beside
Now living our lifes one day at a time.

so Dv what you think can i join then get elavation help

Not bad wait on Lola or Carm.A for your final word

ight coo coo DV

So what you think Lola is it good?;)

Hmmmmm Dopium I'm feeling 2-faced right now, meaning I can say yes, but the other side of my brain is saying no. Your Imaginary is cool, needs to elevate on Emotion, your structure is ok, learn how to put puntuations like commas and all the other stuff cause you asdgjlak;dsgjad s;lfgj. Ending a line with a period, that's telling me "Ok he's finished with that Line" but on the next Line you have the same theme, that's what Commas for, if you have the same theme then put commas by at the end of the line, so therefore what I want you to do is

alg;adjgla;ksdjg,
adgnja;lkjgjlk;a.

^^ Like that, but if your describing the same theme, pleae feel free to

adg;ljajd;glkj,
gal;kdsgjakdg,
adsg;jlakdsjgg,

Ya know? And Your imaginary is ok, but it needs to be more detailed, that's like me saying

"HEY I WENT ON A VACATION"
"HOW WAS IT?"
"COOL"
That's it?...You want more details, feel me?

Elevate on Vocab, Don't use ALOT of vocab just another words to express a Basic word, like a synonyms. Use a Thesaurus for that. Thesarus.com

Hmmm Your Concept is pretty Basic, it's pretty predictable. I want you to take a word and another word that is TOTALLY the Opposite or a random word and then blend them together to make one big giagantic Idea, and write a verse about it. I got this lesson from Atticus, currently trying to elevate on revising, Yes revising is what you need to do too so get @ Atticus for that, but anyway try this

Tree-Soup

^^ Blend them two words together, how is it Link/common with eachother. This a good lesson for Metaphors too.

Hmm That's all I have for you right now boo, so hmmm Get @ Me once you done these things.

Bye.

-Lola Cruez

yea thats why i asked if its 50 50 to let me in and so i can get elavation help cus to be honest i need help and i elavate alot when someones helpin me lola

cus Dv and alot of people say im elavating slow but if someone was coo enough to sit with me and take time to help me elavate then it should be cake so Lola can I join A.I and be in elavation part of crew or whatever? :thumbup:

Cool, well I don't know what to say. Carm.A well get @ You with her Opinion.

Well If it's Cool with DV, then yeah but you'll have to work hard. First thing first


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