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Wow, you're both really fucking terrible. It honestly amazes me how bad this is.

^^^^^^^ he really is, adorable :love: ^^^^^^^^^^^^

Voted For: Aphillyate

most def aphilly got this one

im lean towards the punchlines and delivery
especially the alphabet connection that was sick

P. child no offense but ya shit has to be original
and i think that is wat you lacked in this battle
big upps to you both

neva stopp da elevation

ya digg

Voted For: Aphillyate

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Voted For: Da Problem Child

so when i cum 4 u, ya life, im not sparin it
cuz ya mom shuld had swalowed u to save da embarasment

them two lines killed Aphillyate's whole verse


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Voted For: Da Problem Child

Da Problem Child defo took this one.

Close battle, but he edged it out.

V/ DPC


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Voted For: Aphillyate

How you claiming you great when you first spit straight shit?
Trust me kid, I rip illiterate, dipshit, idiots-- like you nothing, remind me of weak flips
…..cuz you could connect a ‘kick to a lip’ like a lame boarder’
Some ok multis in this, the setup seemed forced though seen as the punch had no rhyme point in it. lol.

I’m on another level trust me bitch, you wouldn’t’ be able to see where I’m at
Cuz I spray lame cats, wit great gats, you’re a fucking flame…

lol, huh?!

Cudn’t respect that, so I smack back, with an attack of on D
…cuz one letter back you’d ‘C’ I’m better than you ‘B’

This was ok, but I felt it could of been executed a lot smoother. but its ok.

‘N’ If its an alapbetical slaughter you suggest, trust me bitch I already did that
So fall back, because I killed this whack-cat…
…like I threw a spear threw “Nat” tha ‘silky-cat’

I dunno man this was just weird, lol, your setups arent smooth man, they mess up your punch, not to mention rhyming cat with cat, lol.

Better hope ya opponent drops weak, cause this is messy man.


i will rip ya name apart and leave u lookin silly
so it would look sumthin like i ate a cat from philly

meh, weak opener.

dis loose lip ass nigga he probly suck more dick then buffy
and he most likely ride dicks like huffys

That was just fucking garbage

since you are a rainbow ass nigga, pray that u get lucky
ur flow iz like ya mouth cuz both of them are sucking

again, fucking garbage, no creativity at all.

when i spit cover ya eyes cuz i likely to blind u
ur rhymes wouldnt get u 50 cent no wonder Gunit wont sign u

No!

i got a electrical flow so expect to get tazed
u need protection fuckin wit me like a nigga wit aids

this is better than the rest a your shit, caould of come more creative.

i spit HIV i will leave u in a bag
so wrap it up sorry i couldnt say the same 4 ya dad

weak, you need punctuation in there ot make it read better

so when i cum 4 u, ya life, im not sparin it
cuz ya mom shuld had swalowed u to save da embarasment

Not sure if its a bite on concepts or just a played line, but ive read that before just setup diffrent.

my keystyles will rip u, imagin if i wrote it
when goin down on niggaz iz the only time u blowin

A keystyle is written. Played line,


bitches neva talk to u only time is when they play ya
he probly jack his meat too watching NBA playerz

wtf?!



Overall, both of these are weak as fuck, seriously, no hate, you both need to step it up somthing crazy. Aphilly gets the vote for creativity. Child you have a few punches in there, but there all simple and played concepts. You need to learn set ups and originality.
Aphilly, you need to learn structure, and originality.

Voted For: Aphillyate

punches: king
flow: child more simple and plain
wordplay: king
multie: king but wasnt so grate
diss: king

overall: king got this battle one sided as fuck no hate

plez RTF agenist me and got soul battle

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Voted For: Da Problem Child

da problem is the fucken man he go hard.....
punchlines punchlines punchlines

signed nate

Voted For: Aphillyate

right well this was easy...

i really couldnt stand 'da problem childs' verse... so generic...

aphilly......i dont know much about your style man, its obviously some sort of modern text style.. i saw the disses i think they could of been a little more straight forward and hard hitting... but you would have to be trying to lose to get beaten by that other guys verse.

Voted For: Aphillyate

Aphillyate took this one.

Explanation: It was better than Da Problem Childs.

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