Ok, The End's verse's were ok, I felt them pretty well. 13, you sounded like a crazy asian, Chrit... All that needs to be said has been said. Keep writing, keep elevating.

ill ass original excuse man...

if i think your ass... your ass... i dont need to hate you...

hating would imply that you have something i wish i had.

which is not the case...at all.

^ I still say that I did pretty good considering it's my first audio. Big jump from text to recording.. so.. give me a few years like you.. and then post in here agian. :cool: lol.

yea....i thought it was dope....and Mad...i sounded like a crazy
asian?...u must be out ur mind....oh....by the way....wheres ur
audio?.....oh yeah....thats right....u suck ass.

Oooohhhh Shitt Niiiiigroz ITS THE ST LUNATICS !!! LMAOOOOOO . . . . . End, You actually wasn't to bad, very good for a first audio indeed . . Liked youre flow at the end that shit was nice . . . 13th Sounds Like A Backstreet Boy Reject On Tour With Nelly LMAOOO!!! . . . Sorry Yo, It's Just The Truth, Youre Flow Wasnt Bad, But It Wasnt Good Either So . . .Yeah . . . Chrit . . Damn Negro This Track Was So Mellow, Then You Sounded Like You was Asleep Get A Little More Emotion, You Sounded Like You Didnt Even Want To Do That Shit . . . .

Not Bad Of A Track, End Shined Both Though . .


Hook Is A Little Catchy . .

Pretty decent audio for a first. It was definately on some bonethugs/babybash type ish but whatever. I dont really know what else to say about it.

first let me say... 3 laptecs dont mix.... for your first audio... YOUR part wasnt that bad.... quality is pretty much disgusting.... lyrics were coo. delivery not to good.... but i see you elevating pretty fast if you keep practicing.. 13th..... not to bad.... i mean to be new to audio i dont expect dzk or nuttin. so relatively speaking.... this wasnt a Horrible song... chrit.. um... keep at it...... you sound like a robot reading a ppaper...... to bland/monotone... gets people bored... put some variation in ya voice..........

ok drop. keep at it.....
note* - its a good practice to write your lyrics with the beat..... dont write them and try to find a beat to spit over.

Thas what I was thinkin. . .

is this even considered hiphop? i really wasnt feelin this, maybe the next will be better.

i let sage listen to it and he wanted to give some feedback since hes banned, he said "stop tryin to be like st.lunatics, this was the worst crap but it made me laugh really hard"

I think it'z dope considering their jump to audio. Personally... If it was recorded at a real studio tha quality would be hard, and I would buy it cuz it'z a hard song.

8/10

I Liked It.. You Guys All Sounded Simlar To Me.. I Couldn't Tell When You Guys Switched. The Hook I Was Def Feeling.. I Am Actually A Bone Thugz N Harmony Fan.. Which Was Why I Was Feelin This. Overall A Nice Newb Audio Drop..

^appreciate that...so...i guess i'm the one who sounds like bone
....oh well....appreciate the real 'critiquing'...and not the bullshit...
keep those comments to urself bitches.....

^^ yeah everyone has to start somewhere,first attempt is never goin to be the best,ive just started recording..and ill admit im not to good at the moment..but im keep on writin and recording and hopefully get better :)

anyway, dunno what it was but i liked this track..i think 13th lost his flow in a few parts..but thats summat that can be worked on...the ends style is different..i think he came the best on the track..the hook was real catchy...and chrit like other people have said add some emotion...sometimes that can be the decider on weather a track is dope or not...you could have good lyrics but they gotta be presented right...know what i mean?....anyway thats just my thoughts on this song,

"keep those comments to yourself bitches"

ok there big guy.

learn to spit and then talk shit

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