i really didn't like some of the lines...well, for flow wise...other than that, it was okay

Kill em cold blooded without a clue of death in my techniques

best line in there, i thought you kinda strayed from your topic though, i really like what you did at the end, or whatever, near the middle to the end, where you started questioning beliefs, but i don't think your whole piece tied in with that.....but, thats just me

not bad, keep up

yea boo u kno i gotta get back to writing been busy with school lately

Nice drop ma. But yeah flow was good, structure was also good, had emotion in it too which went good with the lines...overall great...Keep up the good work. :thumbup:

^Lmao.. you didn't even read it.

Anyway I only read a little bit.. sorry ma. I'll read the rest later though, but overall on what I read so far, it's pretty good.