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Crash 08-05-03 10:47 PM

this shit got no flow....u got no skill fagget my toilet got a better flow

Baron Mynd 08-05-03 10:52 PM

^ Then you write a piece to the same topic w/ the same amount of lines and we'll post them as a topical battle and see who wins, fag. .

Crash 08-05-03 11:02 PM

Wonderful Women.....<------- u wrote this shit 'bout urself??hahaha fuckin drag queen!!!!

Axiom 08-05-03 11:16 PM

OK... this is the first open mic i'm gonna reply to so don't kill me if i don't do it right.

Maybe its their curved behinds, maybe their rounded breasts
Often i find myself captivated by a womans Mounds of Flesh
^Ok, those two first lines were good cuz they got my attention to keep reading it further.

Hours ive spent in admiration of their toned hourglass figures
Watching outta my window, in every Female i see a Princess
^That was nice, and the ending was sweet.

Its been said maybe im obsessed with the opposite sex, but
now women call me Carpenter...always waking up to Wood.
^LOL... that was funny but it didn't rhyme to much... but i saw what you said bout your accent so ok.

I maybe should learn to settle down, but its real hard at night
now im in & out of ladies knickers, more than a transvestite.
^Heh, that was good, not the best line though.

Impressed by simply things, like their hair, or how they talk
Mainly because my Sex Drives . . them up the fucking wall!
^Heh... liked the wordplay, nice.

with luck i'll discover the girl who'll stay true, make me change
& meet Mrs. Right, im just prayin her first name isnt "Always"
^Nice line, but again the whole no rhyming thing.

But for now im enjoying the summer, and i dont mean to gloat
i got bitches and budweiser . . im taking the Tops off of both.
^Best line, mad me actually laugh out loud, i was laughin for like five minutes.

Most guys arent looking for love, just a girl to fuck for a while
but for me its different.. .im after personality and a cute smile.
^That was deep? I think so, and i know where you're coming from.

nothing too wild, just a woman to call mine and give my heart
because women are wonderful creatures, presents from God.
^Nice ending to a semi-comical, serious piece with the presents from God.

Overall nice piece, it was comical at times... but it quickly went back to bein serious... so i give it a border line 8/9 out of 10.

Baron Mynd 08-06-03 12:02 AM

^ Nice breakdown. .

B.Baron.J 08-06-03 12:13 AM

yeh but you need solid rymhes otherwise your structure will fall apart playa.

Baron Mynd 08-06-03 08:14 AM

^ They Are Solid In My Accent. Go Liusten To Nimrods 'Anthrax/ Gastank' stuff, you'll understand. .

BlUnT-MC 08-06-03 11:07 AM

I would've done it more graphic... your imagery lacked compared to ur usual shit, but flow was really good...

"I maybe should learn to settle down, but its real hard at night
now im in & out of ladies knickers, more than a transvestite. "< ----- I liked this line it was pretty funny...

ne-way.. your vocab was at it's normal standard.. I liked it... peace

Baron Mynd 08-06-03 11:26 AM

^ Thanks.
Blah at imagery, it wasnt that type of piece where i get descriptive, it was just a fuck around women admiration / comedy piece, lol.

MiCsYcKlE 08-06-03 11:46 AM

Camrac This was dope

Usually when peoople on here drop stuff to women its fuckin retarded or straight up wack

This was a funny and serious verse very dope man
9/10


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