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MCelmersglue- I like your rhymes, but your structure is very sloppy. Try to fix up the structure. Like this kid:
I'm tired of your dirty mouths to keep "whitey" alert//, the improper speech and those "Dirty South" t-shirts// I use proper nouns and predicates// rap about the white house delegates and about if you battle me the hell you'll get//. You can already tell I'm a threat because I'm precise// Even though I'm white, poor, and live off of rice// ETC. ETC. Do you feel? I like your flow. I say your in if you fix up your structure. Hit us up with another. Mixxed MC- You have any other flows or battles we can check out. |
yo check it now cuz i had like six line before now i got ten yea i got Banned on regular mixxed mc i won all but 1 den i got banned and it sayz i lost here da link
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=119959 http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=119949 |
Violation to Va 2 u said i need to elavate me oK
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if im not in ill go tryout som whurr else iiight 1 ill be waitin herre fo 1 of yall to awnser iight 1
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come on u guyz gonna awnser or what im bout to leave dis thread 5 minutes iight 1
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I've knocked out the problems involved, like my desk it's been Pine-solved
I need to fix up the structure with some foreward slashes\\
While all these other idiots show up with grammatical bashes\\ It makes me so sick I could develop a mixing nervous tick and make my bass lines cause you a seizure with every effin' kick\\ Most of you are illiterate and still say you can spit but anyone can just make up words to make them fit, peep it\\ "I like a lot of macaroni, I pimp hoes on the streetaroni"\\ See, it's easy; Easy proving to you that you're sleazy\\ If I didn't get your attention last time then listen to the rest of this rhyme, and if you feel so inclined try and get into my mind\\ All my raps are educational, and if my words don't contain class I definetly become hesitational\\ Listen up, tonight you won't learn aobut Gastonian architecture or the tube Philopian\\ But you will come to realise we're all in the same class, but I'm the valedictorian\\ *Pushes his glasses up* |
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ok Oc what do u say i need to see 2 text linez of sumtin an ill make my dec
cause dat otha stuff i wasn't feelin |
I say your in. I just think you need to elevate on your wordplay and Vocab. Focus on these two areas and you'll be better. I say your in.
I wanna hear V2 and Shadows Edge's opinions too . |
I just need to question what the point of the crew is... are we gonna have mostly newbs that we are gonna help elevate, or do we want mostly vets? cuz all these guys trying out need to hella elevate, and so does violation-to-va 2 (no offense man). so i dont mind if wel let people in, but we gotta have some sort of system like lyrical leaders for kicking out peeps who aren't gonna elevate and are just ruining our name...
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Mucy better MCelmersglue!! That is what I'm talking about. You got excellent wordplay and vocab. I say your in, V2?
MCelmersglue- I think you would do good in a battle, so try to get in some. I say your in though. |
WHo u talkin to me or him >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>><<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<< <('.') <(*.*)>
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*waits for them to make up their mind,..he knows it takes so long because he's white*
Listen Headphone Murderers, I have a pair of fresh Koss SW30's circa 1980's that could impload a man's head with one bass hit, I'm ready to get killin'. |
True dat Shadow. The only one I think is in is MCelmersglue. I'm not sure about Mixxed MC, he really does need to elevate. I said you were in Mixxed, But Shadow does have a point.
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yo im out u niggas dont AWNSER i guess im not in fuck it 1
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