Everybody Please Poll Vote if you can and Post Critique

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This was just an OK battle in my opinion. Both of y'all need to keep working on your craft... Just Keeping It Real No HATE. Use more multis, set up your punches better and increase the vocab ur using.

Im a battle rhymer straight up hard to the core
flippin flow like pancakes, or like your moms puss when its raw
^ Pretty common insult... OK Punch
In da game a life Im like scarface in my hood
So shit, nobody's as pussy as jgoodz.
^ Mediocre - It's Funny but the setup doesn't really lead to the punch
Come into my hood we'll getm stuckup
Change your name from jgoodz to jgotfuckedup
^ This was the best line of the whole verse... MAD Funny YO - Good Setup and follow-thru
I dont play in this game wit force less than deadly or lethal
The only votes you gon get is from jmomz and j'speople!
^ Mediocre again... but you're on a roll so it's cool.
You probrably think that im funny man your girl laughs too
She said the only thing funnier than me is you in the bed room
^ Weak Diss... Come HARDER Son... Multis Yo... you wanna leave people remembering how intricate your flow is.

total rating - 6 out of 10


look fucka-Iima kill you if neccessary,
in in my hood Im so known by any means legendary//
^ Cool... Bad grammar though.... but liked the "By Any Means Legendary"
I know your flowz- You probaly treasure very
but ima pirate in a battle and the cannon rap have your treasure buried!//
^ Wack... Punches have to some Punchiness to them... this was lame....
and your ryhmes muthafucka-you really need practice-and you eat so much pussy I bet your mouth look like a cactus//
^ Nice off-beat Punch but I'm still not seeing any Personals... makes you seem Pre written
Plus you are what you eat pussy-You probaly even whack-it and your hood so soft like the one on your jackit!//
^ Cool... "Soft like the [hood] on your jacket" that was original
and you will never stick me up you pole rider-plus i heard your still gon pay j goodz to be your ghost rider!//
^ Very Weak - Just not feeling it...
you so fired and Im fired up! -spit so many hot flamez at whack namez rap battles .com need a fire truck//
^ Poor Structure but it was the concept was aight
your not a boss so you wont hire luck-and the next time you approach me better kiss sire's but!//
^ WACK AGAIN!!!
you a fag probaly admire nut!-and your ryhmes the only things that suck besides your luck!//
^ AND ONE AGAIN... WACK!!! - Multi's + Flow + Structure + Personals + Vocab.... This is your closer Damn SON! Bring the HEAT!!!

total rating - 4 out of 10

Vote - nam_208

Poll Vote and Critique if u can
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http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...threadid=100587 and http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...threadid=101623

my voting reason is a few posts up if u look. i wasnt able to vote then, so im using that same reason to vote.

vote - 208

ps: battle links are at the top

Aight fresh thx for coming back and takin it to the votin polls............................................. .................................................. ...........................

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Come on yall vote this battle outa the front lines
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Punches: nam
Flow: nam
Wordplay: goodz
Structure: nam

overall nam

Yo, somebody vote on my battles wit these two.

Nam:
good verse liked this one better then the last one i voted on
you had some good punches ya flow was on key was structured pretty good couldve been better
alright verse
7/10

J Goodz:

ight ya verse needs some work you rambled on about the same things for 2 long and repeated words to much this isnt a repetitive contest of how much u can say hood pussy and treasure
ya punches were lacking and i didnt feel were very hard
ya flow started off smooth then you started repeating and it dropped to being boring like reading a history book
was poorly structured after the first few lines
4/10

Vote: Nam for reasons stated above

Came back to Poll Vote now that I'm 100+... Explanation is above

Honest Vote on my Joints y'all... We all elevating, No Hating Here.

Thx Deelah preciate that
was not my best im committed to bringin in it much harder next time. No more marginal victories ya heard

lmao thyz waz a funny ass battle.... i liked da kaktuz mouth lmao... neway nam_208 took thyz with betta 5truktur an hiz ver5e flowed.... j dawg yoez waz to ¢hoppy

my vote=nam_208

Yeah it was funny. Both of ya'll need to elevate.
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Normally i'd break down both contestans verses.
A little explanation & a overall rating for the verse..
This battle hardly has anything to break down,
To both, elevate.. J Goodz, your piece looks pre-
written, thats never a good thing..u lacked punches..
..Both had no personals.. or good concepts..
Add more complexity in form of wordplay n personals..
Dig through someones profile or previous battles to..
Get material on which u can build your personals.
Nam_208 had a slightly better battle verse..
Therefore, he gets my vote.
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To both, whenever I up my battles, please take time..
To vote on them to, as i do/did on yours..
Especially you..J goodz.
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vote Nam_208