i truely dont know how i could throw in more multis There was one in Nearly every Line..eh..anyway Uppin This y'all

The story was well done, and your structure was good... you had consistent multi's, which is also good... flowed well, and kept a consistent rhyme scheme... the only thing you had problems with was vocab, didnt really push any boundries... and some grammatical problems, but i guess those were just typos.... 8/10

keep dropping

hey man i liked this...... it had a lot of shit that people could relate to.... overall a nice peice, good flow.... out of all the things that people post about feelings i think this is one of the best ones i've seen... ur vocab was on target nice job send me some more of ya posts if ya want i'd like to check them out...

Thanks Y'all^^
Uppn This...

man i read this before and i already left feedback but i just had to read it again because i liked it :)...good drop here man....i expect to see more from you!...i liked the emotion....and i like reading about love cause i write a lot of stuff about that...but yeah man keep writing :)

^^ LoL Thanks again Masta ya really didnt need to post twice...Uppn This looking for some more replies....

Ok Piece Uski. . I've Seen Alot Better. . Like Edicius Said, Imagery Was Forced. . So Reality Didn't Come Through With This Piece. . Flow Was On-Point Tho. .Vocab Was Pretty Good. . Multi's Were Nice. . Emotion Was Ok At Best. . Could've Put More Into It. . Hook Was Nice And Catchy. . Could Definately Make It In THe Commercial World. . Overall, Average Piece From You. Pz.

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