--[Flow]---
Flow was ferocious....loved the way ti was stuctured, was on-point, fluent n' consistant throughout the 3 stanza's....& the rhymes were complex, wern't simple, wern't obvious or apparent...

some good rhymes:
"Ever swirling patterns.. Encrypted into the sky.. The cloud
Tatooed masses of vapour...
... Imprinted on the blue background"

"Craning necks leer.. Dumb-struck faces all point upwards
Sharp beams of light pierce...
... And gleam like polished swords"

--[Vocab]--
Vocab was brutal, you had some dope lines in there, n' the vocab added depth and complexity to it....Words were relative, not irrelevant to the piece...helped to visualise the imagry and the picture you were painting.

--[Concept]--
Concept was full of originality, loved the way you portrayed it...imagry [as i said above] was real n' opaque..., but, was it just a piece about how the sky changes or was it mean't as a metaphor...were you praying, lookin' for inspiration, help??

--[Overall]--
Amazing piece, filled with amazin' imagry....Flow as i said was ferocious..., n' the concept was filled with originality n' real emotion...4.8....dope.

nice piece here....dopeness.....liked your imagery...it was awesome man.... really had my attention with this drop....consistancy and the topic itself was good...fresh....vocab was good....flow was good throughout... prolly ur best OM yet....
good work keep at it...your improving very much so......9/10....
:thumbup:

^indeed

This was an ill Open Mic. I like how you did the Italic to make it look like a pen writing. Good vocab and wordplay. Keep up the good work.

hmmm... this was ok... didn't really catch my eye at any point... but it was an ok drop... had to force my self... not too ill... but i've seen 10000000000 times worse... no dout... just keep at it... an that one kid be madd dissin you...

Caesar - On3

no IDIOT... I never said that u didn't diss back you dumbass... practically putting... the shyt he wrote was nice... nothing further said...

soo once again... IDIOT

Caesar - On3

Day...

An inverted orb.. Concave mirror reflecting the paleness of the land
An ever changing mass of colour...
... It is something that is never bland
good contrast
Ever swirling patterns.. Encrypted into the sky.. The cloud
Tatooed masses of vapour...
... Imprinted on the blue background
r u gay?? lol, nice line
Colour so pure.. Smoothness erupts at you from every direction
Such a deep and meaningful blue...
... It is truly perfection
nice close for the first part


Sunset...

The Sun collides with the horizon.. Releasing a magnificent array of beams
Such a sight is unthinkable...
... Not even inside peoples dreams
Really good line, props
Awe inspiring vision.. Such a glorious wonder of the world to behold
Amazing natural brilliance...
... Is something that never could be controlled
ok
Something so wonderful.. A sight that could easily be a mirage of the mind
The horizon and the Sun become as one...
... Light and Dark start become intertwined
shit hot line!!!!!!

Night...

A mingled mass.. Shining array of pin-holes in the canvas of the sky
Beautifully crafted by a master worksman...
... It could bring a tear to your eye
nice
Craning necks leer.. Dumb-struck faces all point upwards
Sharp beams of light pierce...
... And gleam like polished swords
ok, didnt really think upwards and swords worked tho
Affection from the sky.. A message passed down through the night
No matter how glum the face...
... The Sky can fill it with delight
nice end

Once again a nice concept on this spit, which i think you potrayed beutifully. good flow as alway and structure, nice use of words also. keep em cummin!! 9.5/10

PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOUR ON MY BATTLE UNDER MY SIG. DONT JUDGE ME ON HOW I BATTLE IN THIS BATTLE THO, DIDNT TRY HARD AT ALL, COZ I DIDNT NEED TO!!

The Sky
 

Wow... your drops are always setting the standard and this one is no different. Stunning imagery and excellent creativity. Nice word selection,
it really helps you visualize.Also flowed very smoothy. Very nice...
keep turnin' em' out..always enjoyable to read. Peace.