this was hot.. flow was steady but best of all the words were true, its fucked up how some people live compared to others worrying about shit everyone else takes for granted.. you did a good job of imagery and decent vocab, nice steady flow to help along the ideas making them very clear and easy to make out, nice job on this piece, peep this joint in return..

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113859

^I love this guy! in none-homosexual way!
M!sf!ts!!!! What!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Dope, anymore questions? u probably won't get in2 legends though becuz obviously they are retarded or you would already be there.

^this is the most accurate reply EVER!

Uppin..for the first time...^^

good good...hello pen you're not me are you?

No~I'm me~

no! i'm me

^HOMO!

Lmao..

HOMO!
You should be a Legend.You are very good.

WTF???? Tell that to the clowns that worships you your gay ass!

this was a nice piece...the content was really really dope.
It managed to highlight so many things wrong with society without going in depth about very many...I can't tell if thats good or bad, but it was nice to read none the less.
Your flow was alright, but it was a little choppy in places...you have really nice vocab...not so much that it clogs the piece, but enough that you don't look like an idiot.
My only suggestion would be to develope your own style...something that someone can read and tell that it is you, just by how it is written.
good piece =)

^Thanks Maven/....

dope dope and yes, dope! Legends watch out, Penskilly's about! you go kid! doing yourself proud..