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ILLTALIC..you had an aiight flow and your structure was good. You had some good punches and personals. I liked your closer . You had good wordplay and creativity and consistency...Keep it up

UNWRIITEN...You had a nice flow and an aiight structure. You has some punches but they didnt hit hard enough. No real personals. No wordplay..Keep at it though..

Vote ILLTALIC

return da favour plz...http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=114476

I'm not one to be harsh with criticism. So I'll stay with helping.

Unwritten- You need to start thinking outside the box... Don't use concepts that are common because common concepts WILL be played. You have potential though. Re word your lines until they sound perfect and try to keep each line the same length. Work on your structure as well. Don't use //s "s *s or any other symbols.

illtalic- Same with you.. think outside the box.. I see you were trying to get witty with a few concepts but they were all easy to think of and too common. They were all played. Your structure wasn't bad but you've been here long enough now and you need to break loose from these n00bs. Start reading elite battles and try to get in LLL after you elevate. Battling in Front Lines will not help you.

My vote goes to illtalic because he had better concept ideas and harder punches. Both came weak and both came played but illtalics punches were harder.

V/ illtalic

^ Appreciate it Token.. ya rite there.. i prefer Elevated but votin takes too long.. but i'll stick at it cos i know iv gotta rise..

an im followin links.

i guess illtalic got this one


thanks 4 the votes



but ive been Keyin for 6 years, and im stuck doing //// " " " " " its my thing, its not newbish just how i write my flows.

peace

penis

Token Black guy

At least I.C.U left wiv his head held high.. dumb fukk..

Thanx fa votin peeps..

-uppn- to finish this

Yo Hazard.. sometimes ya jus gotta break wiv ya own traditions.. if puttin all those symbols at the end of ya lines is losin ya respect.. kus stop it!

Simplicity is the key.. forget bold, italic, different font, size etc.. jus make sure ya words are fire.

aight illtalic got this for better punches and personals

ill-nice punches
good peronals
nice flow
good structure
nice openeing
i liked the closer
nice verse,very constant
8-10

unwritten-so so punches
no good personals
ok flow
didnt like the structure
opener was ok
closer was aight
dont bold ur shit,cap it or put those marks on ur punches
5-10

v/illtalic...for a better verse and punches