Alright, its like this. Denounced, stop typing a bar as one continuous line, it makes it hard to see the rhyme.. just type it as two lines. A line is usually 8-15 syllables, each of yours is like around 25, so just cut it in half, make it easy to read. Other than that, nice verse, you had 4 pretty strong punches, original rhymes, pretty decent vocab.

Demo man.. work on punches, vocab, rhyming, flow and structure. Like I said, a line is like 8-15 sylables, and every two lines should rhyme. just keep that in mind when you writing.

V/ Den

D Owned you, pure and simple, hair line was witty as fuck.

Punches- D
Similes-D
Most unwanted bullshit that belongs in a freestyle- Demobx

Vote-D

thanks ..thats a ko man..but you gotta vote in the poll.....

Got say Denounced took da gold noth verses were good but De had better punchez

Can i get like..ONE vote in the poll come on..what does it take to close a battle here..PLEASE PEOPLE VOTE OON THIS!!!!

yo denounced Spoke to me lol he had some pretty hard punches and multis ur structure needs a lil work

Demobx u dint punch as hard as Denounced but u need to improve on ur punches and Multis cuz they were very bad and ur Structure u need alot of work on the


Denounced
open: 7/10
close: 8/10
personals: 8/10
metas: 7/10
punches: 9/10
multis: 7/10
win


Demobx

open: 6/10
close: 7/10
personals: 6/10
metas: 7/10
punches: 5/10
multis: 6/10
Loss


as u can see Denounced gets my vote so ko is the way it flow so bye and holla at me mo 1

Denounced :VOTE: