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Kingz 04-30-04 10:16 AM

Iman u came a lil weak, you didnt make use of the line limit
you shoulda dropeda lil more.

plus you used the same word twice...thas weak

Your like “Good Will” the way your giving things away for free, like this battle//
You could atleast show up next time you decide to rap battle//

accomp didnt come hard at all but easily enought ot take the win

ya feel my rhymes...beakya from cannibus to those plastic nines....
spit a 4 minute keystyle...but i could killya in half da time.../

vote acc

virt 04-30-04 11:29 AM

Iman you performance came good but it seemed you didn't care about winning this battle...Your punches were week and i dont think is good to rhyme the same word twice.

Comp had a C- verse, but still took the win.
"Mardi gras" line was good and the "plastic nine" was also good.

vote~comp

Vc 04-30-04 11:47 AM

u never use the same word twice that kinda destroys he flow only eprson i know that can use the same word twice are sean paul beenie man wayne wonder...connection reggae music always rhymes twice not regualr rap artist.... the onyl regular rap artist that can get away wit it is twista. cuz u dont understand anythign he says anyway...

but you came a lil weak unconcerned liek u knew u had accomp beat already but thast not the turn of event..

accomplish came out on top and won this battle... even thought he coudla done bette tooo but this vote goes too
accomplishment

L.I. 04-30-04 03:00 PM

My Vote
 
Give the boy a chance at winning this battle//
At least give him a line minimum he can handle//
Didn't really rhyme...wack punch...
Unlike my skills, something that you will never defeat//
You might as well try to defeat Mohammad Ali//
Blah...no rhyme again...
Before you battle me, cuz I ain’t no wanna be//
I am ones of the realist MC’s, one of the best//
Hmm....tried sum multi's...but they dont mean nething if they done help a punch...and they didnt help a punch...
Your like “Good Will” the way your giving things away for free, like this battle//
You could atleast show up next time you decide to rap battle//
finally its over...

Okay...You need to work on punches mainly....get punches first before working on anyhting else...work on using personals....just go to tutorials cause you need help in everything....especially rhyme scheme....simple as that....On a scale of 1 to 10 i'd give your verse a 1....cause nothing rhymed....no punches...just elevate man...

...yo I'can't be handled...respected world wide...i dont know who dis hoe is...
yo we could both disapeer...come back and see who remain to be noticed.../
Ok opener...not that great of a punch...
underestimating what you hardly saw...cuz i'm showin up like tits at mardi-gras...
kid just learnin to walk...but my punches can make you hardly crawl.../
Nice punch...good multi's...good bar...
accomp known to hit'em...commin at ya xp style not dis ms dos prompt system...
dissmiss em'...elevatin like david blaine...sky high i'm known to lift em.../
Not any real punch but ok multi's....ok metaphor too..
ya rhymes is "soar" that don't mean ya elevatin....
airplanes couldn't lift ya level higher than mine...i'm everest slangin..../
Nice nice nice...
me an you compared is like pizza wit out sauce...just half da flavor...
even if ya ass owned mead notebook company...you couldn't have half my paper.../
lol funny...
ya feel my rhymes...beakya from cannibus to those plastic nines....
spit a 4 minute keystyle...but i could killya in half da time.../
Niiice closer...

Now this is a decent verse....i know you didnt come hard cause u woulda straight up murdered him if u went at ur fullest potential....but u did whut u had to do....got an easy win....good punches...lman u can learn ish from that verse....also u had good multi's accomp....nice spit for not tryin....on a cale of 1 to 10 id give it a 7....

Vote - accomplishment

accomplishment 04-30-04 03:03 PM

haha i win.... KO dirta boi close dis shit.

DirtBoy69 05-02-04 04:34 PM

i don't care bout being a few minutes late as long as your verse or check in is in the thread the next morning when i close them your fine anyway back to the vote:

breakdown for lman_1528:

flow:best part of your verse good job here no problems with it 7/10

volcab:basic use nothing special like you weren't trying or somehting 5/10

punches:same here as the volcab you didn't really seem to try too much nothing real direct and hittin i thought try harder next week 4/10

overall:16/30 i've seen better from you

breakdown for accomplishment:

flow: good job not the best i've seen from you but you've rebounded from last week's loss well 7/10

volcab:pretty good could of been stronger your not seeming to have put too much effort into this 6/10

punches:best line wasn't even really a punch at him,"underestimating what you hardly saw...cuz i'm showin up like tits at mardi-gras..." i just liked it some alright actually punches too 6/10

overall:19/30

vote--accomplishment good to see you in the winning column again

DirtBoy69 05-03-04 09:38 AM

7-0 accomplishment wins this


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