uppin i only need one vote. so now what you think unfortunate?

This was a close. but mediocre battle.

No hate.
AKA
Fix your structure. No more //'s and even up your lines. Your punches were in the right direction which is good. Now all you have to do is capitolize a little bit more. Your personals were also so-so. not good but they weren't bad. just re-word some things and you'll be fine.
Unfortunate
I've said this in quite a few battles. Your ryhme scheme is to predictable. I knew what word u were gonna ryhme wit before i read it. Also, your punches were jus a tad played an weak. No hate. Just some advice on what to strengthen up.

very close but...
Vote/AKA

bothe elevate sum.
Hit my battle's in my sig wit sum honest votes' thanks.