nice poem keep up the good job

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damn that's very good

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Suggestion: Don't up so much, do what i do... Comment on other pieces you haven't commented on and drop a link... You're freeposting there buddy. Anyways.

I think this was just as good as the last one, and for the same reasons. The last 3-4 lines were the best of the poem. I would like to see more form you, but maybe something longer? 6/10

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ay...thx fa da suggestion liquor of tears...i'll do dat from here on and thanks fa the feedback...

Yeah, I thought it was good. It was definitely an emotional peice. I think you really hit your heart on that one and let yourself open up, which is what poetry is all about. However, for me, sometimes it's hard to read a poem and actually give it any recognition and not get bored with it when you use abbreviations. I don't know if maybe that was just part of the artistic nature in which you wanted to display it, or maybe it's just out of habit. Either way, I didn't like that. However, on the total, I liked it. Good job.

ay thanks for the feed...most definatley appreciate it...uppin

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this is a great poem so keep it and also u made a good point in it too.

thanks fa da feed...uppin