RapVerse.com Community - Sporadic Vs ibraheem (Topical)

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Sporadic: Spordaics verse was much more in depth.. very well written... could picture your self in his shoes in tha story....had more details and still flowed well.... very nice..

[i]inbraheem:[I] Inbraheem also had an ok verse but wasnt as good as spor'z....tho inbra flowed nice in some parts spor took it for the way he wrote it..... all in all spor got this..

V- Spor

i like sporadics flow a lil better
i felt wut both of u were sayin
but i felt sporadics a lil more
so he got my vote

AMAYZE i would'v returned the favor if you had a better explained vote there is much than feeling the verse that you can talk about
with respect
upping
peace

upping this theard..some more explained votes plzzz

upping this theard i will return the vote into ur battles pz

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wow nice battle guys........

ok sporadic = your structure to start with was great, really made it easy for the reader to get it, also the flow helped this as well and was nearly perfect....dont think you fell off at any part in the piece!! rite now the writers voice for me is the most important part of a topical battle and you potrayed it in a way that made me stay glued to my screen...you described the actions and emotion great!! vocab was there, nicely worded!! really good piece man!!

Fav part =

i take the dive memories flash past as i plunge to my death
last words to my loved ones with a whisper "i love you"
..with my very last breath

^^ great last line

Ibraheem = also wow, your structure was different to sporadics, but still near perfect, and your flow WAS perfect....you couldnt of got it better if you tryed. ok your writers voice came out nice, the way you blamed the goverment and showed that Bust and bin laden aint that different!! i liked the contrast!! didnt think you had as much emotion as sporadic but still real nice!!

Fave line = I got an idea that I would like you to join/
Thinking GW Bush and binladin 2 different faces of the same coin/

^^ good contrast

So really nice topical battle both of you, but i think i'm going with sporadic, just on the fact that he explained a like jorney instead of writing facts!! but both of you props!!

Vote Sporadic

HIT UP MY POEM........... WHITE DOVE - MY PRAYER

PZ

finish it!!!!....want to get up to 5 wins so i get out ov this herb infested front lines

vote and leave a link and i will hit you back on your battles

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upping da theard...finish it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

yo im a have to go wit ibraheem, shit wat he said was real that i could feel, he did stick yo the topic, like sparadic but went different ways in goin about it
sparadic took me on a journey, a little more wordplay would of had the audience attention

vote ibraheem

good topic also, that shitts serious
aight ni99as
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