it was good not hot but above good work on ya vocab though

and that is it pc

^ thanks bump...............

bump!

thnx all 4 fb....more plz...open mic of july/august plz...lol

The only problem that I have with it was that the lines seemed stretched. Oh and that you seemed like you were throwing complex words in there just for effect. Other than that, dope drop. NOT flow of the month shit though.

they arent.. and its wordplay. please dont give fb if u dont understand

Ass. Wordplay is beyond just using words that you really don't know just to sound cool. Don't critique feedback if you don't read it properly. Now, like i said, some of the lines seemed stretched and throwing complex words in a drop just for effect isn't good.

it doesnt matter if lines are stretched in text, read it out loud or there isnt any flow, and if u can critizie so well, write something better.

What? First and foremost, it DOES matter. Text is nothing but writing your rhymes. If your written shit don't have a decent flow to it, we know how shitty your audio sounds. How do you figure that it doesn't matter?
Second, if that's what you want, then I will. Give me a line limit.

dont relly know I knoww all the words I used duh.......not everyones stupid...

but thnx 4 tha feedback

I'm not saying you're stupid. Hehe, I was simply saying that the amount of big words you put in there gives off the impression that you wrote that using a thesaurus for every word in there. I'm not hating, unlike what your partner thinks. Keep it up.

too k me 5 mintues to do mine.......and thnx we NEED constructive critcsim