Voted For: fluidmoon

good battle

fluidmoon - i was really feeling the flow of this.. i think it ended a lil to soon, i think you should of had a middle verse in there about his dad keeping a diary also.. like one entry from it.. but it was a good job nevertheless.. i liked how it eneded with his had writing in his suns journal.. that and the flow of your verse is what really won it for me..

magic - yours seemed realistic, as well as fluidmoons.. but i didnt really connect with it as much.. the words you sometimes used to rhyme with each other. rhymed, but they didnt.. i hope you know what i mean.. like eternity and entity dont really match up well, ya know ?.. you had imagery and everything.. was a decent verse.. but i felt fluid was on top of this topic pretty well..


if you get a chance, and see one of my battles any where, jsut drop a vote or w/e.. no pressure tho


props to both of you for a good topical battle

up up uppin............................................. .......................1

Thanks for the votes all,.. Up~ing

~1

Voted For: MagiC

damn close battle
i liked fluid's meaning
how he had a story but
i liked MagiC's flow better
n he also had a story so i gave it 2 him
v/MagiC
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Voted For: fluidmoon

damn this was a long ass battle...damn,lol....fluidmoon took this one wit nice wordplay, and nice punches and multies...nice flow...bad structure tho, too many extended lines...elevate

magic nice flow, but you fell off near the end, and thats wut did it...elevate

Voted For: fluidmoon

Fluidmoon has my vote because she has more emotion and more word play in hers. They were both good itz just fliudmoon set it ova the top. MagIC need a lil more pratice and needs to work on the flow of his/her words