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Voted For: INFALLIBLE

My vote goes to infallible his multis and wordplay were sick is structure was right on point and verse was juss overall sick. I.mind's drop was super tight in the begining but dropped off at the "high skewl" line structure was way off after that and super strhced for words to rhyme.

Vote - INFALLIBLE

word up thnx for the honest v's here, still uppin tho need some mo ta close this shit out aight -1-

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This was feedback posted for ..::Sinister::..
 

Voted For: ..::Sinister::..

Okay....both were good...man this is the first time i gotta use the break down meth...lol...
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structure:.Dab
Story:.Dab
humor:IN.
Vocab:.Dab
opener:IN
closer:.Dab
overall:Dabatos
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reason:better story all together..and a nice short but good verse...IN...your verse was streched and too long...good job Dabatos ....~1~]

Voted For: ..::Sinister::..

dabatos took this in my opinion. I think he hit the topic harder, and made it way more intersting. infallible, i didnt vote for you, cause i felt your verse was rather simplete, and too poorly structure, and I fell alseep 3/4ths of the way. Never type over 30 lines homie. but dabatos got my vote. RTF plz...Links in sig. hit up at least one of em.

Voted For: ..::Sinister::..

dabatos-

emotion- could of been stronger but still there.
lyrical content- personnaly I wasn tfeelign the way you spelt certain words wrong.Shyt..dis..comin...cuz...dat...wen...jst.
Its a topical so correct grammar usually helps.
story line-was there but not really strong, but still had one there.
imagery-was good.especially the last line.
originallity-not much to it. you dropped pretty straight forward.
structure- good could of been slightly better but still good.

other guy-
emotion- wasnt really feeling it seen as you wrote more of a mixed up song rather than a deep topical drop.
lyrical content- Isnt strong at all. Nothing that stood out.again words spelt qwrong/slang.to me they dont fit in a topical peice.
story line- not there at all. culdnt even understand if you were still on topic at some points
imagery-couple a lines had some good imagery, but needs to be worked on like a ma'fuckah.
Originality- nothing. There isnt nothing original about your drop.
strusture-a mess,stetched lines,.mixed syllable counts.

vote-dabatos

Voted For: INFALLIBLE

dab-this wasnt your best effort i could tell, ive been readin your topicals for ever..you couldve done way better then this...(we both know that)you had started off good but just got side tracked n it didnt flow as well as i thought it shouldve..srry....but if ya dont put the effort in ya aint gonna get the win(feel me)...srry fam
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fallll.....this was started off real wack but i kept readin cuz your flow was on n stayed pretty consistent(which was weird conbsidering your poor structure)some of your lines are identical to 2pacs shit...but idk....your protrayed this topic well after the opening first couple bars...seemed like it was a real close topic to you............my advice is fix ya structure 4 next tyme...watch your quotable lines and dont repeat bars like a chorus..its a topical...not a song ..but overall i think you wrote the topic better..........
infallible....RTF IN MY SIG..........

Voted For: ..::Sinister::..

aight realli i dont like votin on topicalz but imma make a exception

dabatos put more effort into this piece he had some linez dat i could actually picture n mah head i felt as if dabatos had this happen 2 him or sum 1 b4 cuz he had alot of imagery n it his shit was balanced each line followed da otha so dabatos get mah vote 4 havin more imagery n hiz piece

v-dabatos RTF