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This is poetry.
I say this because it would be impossible to make a song.
You've squeezed too many word's into one bar to try & increase vocab.
I mean, it's good no dout but not even twista could make that an audio.
i also realised you used a smaller font


Anyway on content it was like a name with 3 topic's..
You did have multi's there . . alot which made it hard to understand your topic.. multi's are good but to many make what people read confusing


This is cool . . Although i think motives and bullet's is a half assed rhyme . . which could have been thought about better


I think this was a good chorus.. it's the only thing i really understood over the open mic's name.


Overall

it's not the best i've seen .. because many rhymes were forced and not all self-explained


Maybe because i'm english... but i dont understand this you'll need to explain this . . to me.

overall 7.7/10 it's a good score.. my average is 6.77/10.

peace.

bomb shit liked it alot, good visuals,and nice word play, feeling it , had an all around good vibe which was nice, had a super easy flow, but the chorus coulda used a lil work , but who am i to judge peace

(Directed At Masked)...
Woooooow...
Thats A Breakdown...
But Ya, The Whole "Two Hits Drops My Like Eight Bricks"...
Like Two Punches To The Face And I Fell Fast Like Eight Bricks...
Bricks From A Building...
And Ya The Motives-Bullits Was A Stretch But I Just Needed It For The Story...
But Ya The Lines Are Strectched...
But Its Text, And Due To The Numerous Multies Is I Was Gonna Make This Audio I Could Just Chop Everyone Of Those Lines In Half...
And Shit Will Still Flow As Good It Would Just LOOk Longer But It WOULD Flow Better On Audio...
Thanks For That Breakdown Though, This Board Needs More Responses Like That...
.One.

No problem.. it's good.

It should be nominated...but everyone has opinon's.

yes, i absolutely agree w/ mostly everyone one here, this was a beautifully written, well crafted piece that seemed to have taken you a lot of time, you used your words in a way that captured the imagery perfectly,,once again you have proved to us that you have skill, and that your an artist....................peace 1

You are definitely a talented writer. I am, however, a bit confused as to your choice of content.. Is this a counter-conscience centered flow or is it really meant to be the 'I leave people dead, I step over them and keep it movin', keep it gangsta'flow? (Know what I mean?)

On another note.Your writing.. I bet you write poetry with little effort and great results.. If you do not write poetry very much, do it more. I almost guarantee you that you will have found yet another love.

This is a certafiable win, nice way to set an example of how to drop an open mic. You got my vote.

Nice Question...
But It's Alittle Of Both...
Because In The Piece I'm Very, Almost Disturbed By Whats Goes On...
But I Continually Move On...
So It Doesnt Rep Killing It Doesnt Put It Down...
It Reps Doing What You Have To Do No Matter How You Actually Feel...
And Ya I Have Like Three Poetry Drops On Rv's Poetry Forum...
And I WAS In The Poetry League And Winning But That Shit Died Out...
But Ya, Poetry Does Come Pretty Easy...
Because When I Do Topical I Write Poetry But Add Tons Of Multies...
But With Poetry I Have More Freedom Because It Doesnt Even Have To Rhym At All, Let Alone Have 2 Or 3 Multies Schemes Revolving Threw 1 Bar...
And Thanks For All The Support People...
.One.

yea i vote it the best open mic for the month cos damn you got skillzz

yo that was dope man hell it would be...

Mayne When U Pm Ask Me To Look At Dis Shit It Wqas Worth It Mayne Dayum Nice Drop

Amazing piece and when asked "is it worthy of best open mic of the month", I say yes, in.

Fer real man that was some tight shit .. Real deep n had meaning bro..Good shit..

now that shit was amazing it was a basterd to read cos the words were so small but im gonna have to give this to ya it was amazing in my opinion the storyline itself was hot id definitly say its worth open mic of the month...