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Your punches were wack.
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word i aint see no real punchlines on the real i just seen an attempt at creativitie an wordplay no goood punchs in this piece to me so kind of a bad title for this piece overall 4/10 elevate or try a different type of piece :thumbup: |
aw hell those punchlines were hitting cats everywhere but under the bottom of the feet yall give it up thanks for responding and critiqueing doe
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Yo maddrapper nice punches hommie,,,
Heres something I just thought I would put in ,,being that you're my hommie an all. Here's some punch lines I would use in a battle ,,,not really though,, because there to simple,,but you get the point when you read them though. I spit better verses,,, when I had snuff in my mouth!! An I really dont give a fuck about who's putting me down! Im the bank bitch,,,,,So that means im taking your house! Putting a lean on you're shit,,so you can get the fuck out!! Its not all that good,,,but there are 2 punches in it though. |
alrite crap
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i am the king!!! jp
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1. 5MICMEDALLION thanks for the props on this not bad punchlines
2. for rhyme reaper and rhyme4ever you have to show something talk is cheap so taqke this nickel and buy chewing gum HA! HA! HA! |
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Nice catches, nice flow. My only advice is the advice I offered in your other thread about combining the lines and perhaps separating it (to stress the rhyme) with slashes ("/") .. |
Wow...you steal my title then drop those lines, there wasn't 1 punch present....if you gon try to bite off my alias you gotta come correct, they were somewhat creative but not punches, try writing poetry cuz you got ok wordplay
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1. Ms.Skillz4daze thanks for the advice gonna try that
2. come on man you didn't title yours that way that just come off the top of my head if really so I apologize for real |
Herres a few lines incase you think im still crap biitch!!
1}I can out rap haters in two ways.....now an christmas 2}You couldn't out spit a fish,,,If you had water in you're veins 3}I drop better flows,,So who the fuck waisting! I got more punch lines then you got in you're whole life saving! 4}You couldn't come back with a better punch line,,if you're name was reverse 5} better yet,,,,heres a line I wrote in one of my flows I drop harder bars then laxatives do bitches on ass holes!!! ~warnning~!! Things not to say to me before you know me!!! alrite crap __________________ P.......S........A Tha Dopest Crew Yet ---------------- RYMHEREAPER ~VERDICT~ Always remember you're not ready,,,So get your weight before trying to gain on me bitch!!!! |
5MICMEDALLION not very good punchlines well ask somebody else hell i could be wrong doe
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none,,,look down
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look down :evilgrin:
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yea you're right,
You are wronge there nice punch lines,,I think yall got the wrong idea of what punch lines are,,,its like telling a joke,,but being witty at it,,,, But you're using it in a flow,,,,its like saying,,, some thing like this ~would you like me to get you a laxative,,,because none of yall doing shit~ Now if you understand that,,,we're getting some where,,, Some times a punch line dont have to ryhme,,,,some thing like this Im like a piece of pie in a prize fight,, Every bite is a winner ~Class dismissed~ You're all lucky,,,,I guess you were saved by the bell,,,,lol |
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