Voted For: jewpride

and even though they dont got "hands" ima let the bullets "touch ya"/
my "confession"...when i take out the 4/5 ima let it "burn" like "usher"/
^this line alone is enough to crush "2pacs" whole verse.

2pac, how you gonna expect to win a battle when all you do is ramble and cliche? No wordplay, no hard hitting punch, no nothing. Overall you both need to work on flow. You usually want all your lines to be around the same length and the same syllables. Keep improving.

that last line was clever though jew. Concised it up and that would've been a classic line.

Don't forget to return the favor...\/

Voted For: 2pac

vote for 2pac -

this was close but due to complexity and a few better lines 2pac wins,

also i swear i recognise the "let it burn like usher" line.... maybe bitten??

Voted For: jewpride

alright, props to both. but here's the verdict

2pac-you had no structure on this whatsoever, take a look at jew's structure a little. People hate to have to search for where the rhyme is, and that's what i had to do, go back re-read, and see what rhymes with what, and this is bad. also the verse read like, a very amateur freestyle. like somebody was freestyling at a party, and sucked. No diss or beef at all, i'm just trying to help you elevate.

jewpride-simply by better structure you had this one. but in your short verse, you did have a shiner. which was the last one
my "confession"...when i take out the 4/5 ima let it "burn" like "usher"/
the line before it was a good connection to it, in terms of gun talk, i liked this line.

so for better structure, and punches, i voted jewpride

Voted For: 2pac

2pac...won dis one...had harder punches...betta flow...betta structure...

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Voted For: jewpride

i think Jew Got this..... not really and punchlines or no multis and this battle was horrible..... 2pac fix ur stucture cause i dont know when ur rhymes are and its really hard to read....

2pac id kill ya but its a against my morals/
worst rapper ever im basically sayin your horrible/
lololol 4/10
if you scared to write we can do it verbally/
either way this'll be your last battle, ill leave you scarred permanatly/
kinda strecthed 4/10
and even though they dont got "hands" ima let the bullets "touch ya"/
my "confession"...when i take out the 4/5 ima let it "burn" like "usher"/
Nice one 6/10


well im chillin on da wall all i got iz my wordz and my ballz ill take you out like hitler and jews i got my henny in my hand dont know wat u want has your death plan im not predjudis im not wit ku-klux-klan yes im christian i come through whistlen ill beat u up like a 7th grade bully nigga dont feel bad get gully the only thing that can save u iz da holy ill kill for fun like i say in all my raps ill make every one call me god son i come through sprayin so listen to wat the fuck im sayin that way u know if im playin oh by the way no niggaz i aint hatein ill rub 1 off like i do in masterbation bi tch wgy u think itz penitration punk ass bitch
wtf? lol



my vote goes to Jew kid cause his structure was good but thats about all