Voted For: Mad Dog

Im Gonna Give This To Mad Dog...
ONLY Because He Thought Outside The Box On His Concept...
Cuz You See Shoot Out And Automatically You Think Hitman, Cimes, Robbery...
Those Are Standerd...
Mad Thought Away From That And Made The Topic More Original...
But Poet Ya Shit Was Crazy...
Vocab Was ILL, And Ya Shit Was Mad Nice But Just Not Above Mad Dog's Shit...
Vote: Mad Dog
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This was feedback posted for Poet
 

juss checkin
poet: nice topic u was really on the topic very nice shit nic drop
MAd: you was good too nice verse

Nice Abs thanx uppin this yet again...............

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Voted For: Poet

ok.this was nice by both.
structure...
first off poet yours instantly looked the better verse,very neat and tidy srtructure...the small writing works real well,looks neat any gets u more complex vocab into a verse..without lookin stretched.
mad dog...try getin urs like that.(i know im gona)...
its notin to really vote on,but it jus gives u that beta first impression, looks more proffesional,polished and more appealing.

vocab...i think poet took it here also..more complex word usage, which helps a topical verse cos it adds more depth...n complexity is harder to achieve.

imagery... again im gon hve to go wit poet...i felt his was more in depth...he delved deeper into the mind and emotions going on...it was a real deep verse.mad dog urs was gud too, but like i said i felt poet had u in this area.

enjoyment
ok havin said that i did actually enjoy mad dogs more....i felt it was easier to follow and although a simpler piece overall tha poets....i enjoyed it more..
but enjoyments a personal thing,n thas jus my opinion...

multies.../fboth fairly even,,,,,,id say poet took it here because of his vocab......his rhymin was more complex.....
although the flow was about tied.

overall my vote is poet.
mad dog u had a nice verse...but i think poet jus about took it in every area....it was overall a more in-depth and complex piece.
vote-poet....

by the way.whoeva wins,id like ta battle.gud drops
peace

Nice explination i'm new to this so i'm laring all the time hopefully my next battle should get better feedback than this but yea i enjoyed this battle too...uppin

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This was feedback posted for Poet
 

alright mad dog....your verse was alright...some of your choice words for rhyme words wern't the greatest...youtr vocab was good at times...and at times it wasn't..and your story jumped off too quick...it made it interesting at first...but with all the action and no plot twist..it lost it's luster....nice verse though


Poet...nice verse...very nice....transitions were good....you ended every part at just the right time....AWSOME imagery....you and mad dog both had good imagery..but i saw your verse a little more for some reason...vocab was nice...and this



As I pace slow-mo to the elevator..........Press floor 8 then wait for the doors to close..
Im standing posed.. Watching the world pass, my mind goes......Like I physically froze..
Then snap back to reality.. Return with my killer mentality.. Crystal clear with actuality..
Checkin my clip as I dump my coat, clear my throat..Now its Time for a fucking "Corperate

i really liked....I interpreted that as a guy who is doin what he was sent to do....but is maybe seein the world through different views than just life and death....like maybe he is starting to feel some kind of value....and than he just snaps back to what his reality is....could be a wrong interpretation...but thats what poetry is for...

i give my vote to poet...you both had good verses...i just think poets ability to word his thoughts..amd creativity won this over..good battle though..much respect

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