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LI i wanna speak with u on AIM next time u got a second...it corresponds with this in a way
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This was good
But i beat Feeble Minded On rapbattles b4 he was a mod over there He then asled me into his crew, and that was over a year and a half ago....... SO i guess this was OK |
Yeah Apo get at me on AIM... Git Fugged Up is my new aim name...
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well i need help not to much tho just punches and a bit wordplay and multi's and thats basially it i got vocab and flow and stucture basically anyone that can help me on msn i tryed to get aim but cant for now sence im waiting ill try and do my shit off what L.I posted there:)
holla:laugh: |
yo i cant help with this my bad but i got a battle forum and i gotta work on that to keep my battles toghther :thumbup:
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^ya i need porsanals help right here:)
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heres a verse and tell me what you think of it its from my battle verse Nutz-B in my sig but heres a little verse:)
I’ll Re-write yer life with my punches and you’ll be the first to act-up… After then you’ll need to go to the doctors office to get yer close-up/ Its yer first time to lose to me, cuz im a straight up hardcore emcee… Out rule you fast ill get another “K.O” cuz yer verse sucks, well I disagree/ Ill turn yer life around from this point on you’ll be known as a handicap… You will be walkin around like that cuz my verse was like a pimp-slap/ I hit bitches and stunt muthafuckas like you around the place… Even everyone in “RV” says that yer bitch-ass is a disgrace/ |
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I’ll Re-write yer life with my punches and you’ll be the first to act-up… After then you’ll need to go to the doctors office to get yer close-up/ No punch..thats really just a statement... Its yer first time to lose to me, cuz im a straight up hardcore emcee… Out rule you fast ill get another “K.O” cuz yer verse sucks, well I disagree/ Saying you disagree is stating that his verse is good and your gonna lose...word you shit better... Ill turn yer life around from this point on you’ll be known as a handicap… You will be walkin around like that cuz my verse was like a pimp-slap/ Come on man...just gay punches... I hit bitches and stunt muthafuckas like you around the place… Even everyone in “RV” says that yer bitch-ass is a disgrace/ Your trying to form a punch but ur just stating your concept...get creative! Now what you need to do is say what u wanna say to him in a creative way...so u wanna say they are gay...well heres sumtin u could say... You ride all over my dick.. well now ive straight up had it... Cause this fag has hit more balls.. then a tennis racket... While sumtin you would spit is... Everyone claimin you suck.. your lame and hey... This whole site pretty much thinks your gay... You see what I'm getting at?...you gotta let your mind think of creative metas to make that concept hit hard...or else its pointless to even try to form a decent concept... |
oops^^ i forgot to change that instead of disagree, wha ti ment to say is:
Its yer first time to lose to me, cuz im a straight up hardcore emcee… Out rule you fast ill get another “K.O” cuz yer verse sucks, well I don't disagree/ |
well its gonna take a while for me to elavate im only 12
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It's okay man...ur going in the right direction...just work on it...its not like it happens overnight...im just trying to help...dont take it the wrong way
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alright kool ya i kno ill try harder next time:laugh: elavation elavation aka. practice practice
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hows this tell me feedback on this:
Ill battle anyone over you cuz you wack, is what I meant… Just from this punchline you lost and I got more then 100 percent/ |
LI is cool.
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A battle I had vs for$aken, but I changed some words and shit to make the strucuture better, can you plz show me how this verse coulda been better, then original battle is in the sig, and if I posted it the same way I did in here^^ It woulda been hella lot better, cuz it was sloppy in there |
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