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Compose 10-04-04 04:44 PM

i wasnt dissin you, its called an opinion..........

lil C.A.L.I 10-04-04 07:54 PM

Voted For: poison

aight poisons verse

aight
ima give u some reason not to fuck with me
check it out

i got gats thats made for stickin/
i get more chicks laid than chickens/
cleaning mc's like mades in kitchens/
got rhymes that u cant handle
in a battle, i'll wear u out like a sandle/
my raps glow like a candle
yo i stand out like hair with jell
make u fall out this rap game, oops u just fell
cuz ur rhymes aint well
it wont ring a bell
so shut yo mouth up fore i turn ur life to hell
u'll drop screamin like a roller coster
bust my gat and stick u like a fuckin poster
do i got cash? i get more bread than a toaster
in rap im numba one
my rhymes over cuz i got "FINAL"y done

and finals verse

this kid claims in his rhymes he spits nothin but venom, shit...../
but the only poisonous liquid he spittin is inside of his dick/(AIDS)

this is not what i expected,this kids rhymes are horrendous/
his flow is so offcourse.........it matches with his record/

those corny raps u bringin aint accepted,that shits despised/
ya record keeps plummiting..........to a steady fast decline/

so poison u got this
verse=7/10
punches=8/10
structre=8/10

final keep elavating

punches=6/10
structure=5/10
rhyme=4/10

Compose 10-05-04 02:38 PM

uppin............................................. .

JackOfAllTradez 10-05-04 02:45 PM

Voted For: final

Emcee: Final

Verse:
this kid claims in his rhymes he spits nothin but venom, shit...../
but the only poisonous liquid he spittin is inside of his dick/(AIDS)

this is not what i expected,this kids rhymes are horrendous/
his flow is so offcourse.........it matches with his record/

those corny raps u bringin aint accepted,that shits despised/
ya record keeps plummiting..........to a steady fast decline/

Comments:well....you need top elevate and make sure all the words go with eachother to make sense....um...work on punches and wordplay, vocab and metas...

Marks:
Wordplay - 4/10
Metas - 5/10
Vocabulary - 4/10
Structure - 6/10
Punches - 5/10
Opener - 8/10 liked that one
Closer – 5/10
Personals – 4/10
Enjoyment – 4/10
Creativity - 4/10
Overall - 49/100
----------49%

Emcee:poison

Verse:
i got gats thats made for stickin/
i get more chicks laid than chickens/
cleaning mc's like mades in kitchens/
got rhymes that u cant handle
in a battle, i'll wear u out like a sandle/
my raps glow like a candle
yo i stand out like hair with jell
make u fall out this rap game, oops u just fell
cuz ur rhymes aint well
it wont ring a bell
so shut yo mouth up fore i turn ur life to hell
u'll drop screamin like a roller coster
bust my gat and stick u like a fuckin poster
do i got cash? i get more bread than a toaster
in rap im numba one
my rhymes over cuz i got "FINAL"y done

Comments:work on ya fuckin structure...jeez...and elevate as much as you can...on every aspect of ya skillz...

Marks:
Wordplay - 4/10
Metas - 4/10
Vocabulary - 3/10
Structure - 0/10
Punches - 3/10
Opener - 4/10
Closer – 3/10
Personals – 4/10
Enjoyment – 1/10 but i had to read it..
Creativity - 2/10
Overall - 27/100
----------27%

JackOfAllTradez 10-05-04 02:46 PM

return the favor........in the sigg.............................

Incineratedrose 10-05-04 03:04 PM

Voted For: final

well.. both verses were MAD weakness... but still i thought that Final took it in this midst of weakness... He seemed to stick out of the Fog of wackness the most, his punches were better i didnt really dig Final's opener BUT i thought the rest of his verse were just a lot better, so good job with that, the closer was decent so good job with that also, all in all i thought that final took this one due to his better working punches which connected and hit a lot harder...

Good job...

v/ Final


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