Voted For: ...Apocalypse...

Big Pappa76: i think this was a good attempt for a first topical but it just wasn't good enough, i don't like how u basically wrote about hell, and when did satan start sending peeps into limbo?, i figured he would keep them in hell, it was ok, structure was pretty good, ok flow, some good wordplay, i was lost at the 1923 part (???), elevate a lil more and u could be good


Apocalypse: i like how u seperated heaven and hell, there susspose to be seperated cause they r different place, killer wordplay, nearly flawless structure, flowed great, good vocab too, i enjoyed reading it.


vote: Apocalypse

no hate, return the honest votes peeps, battles r in my sig

uppin this shit... i know Apoc won this one... hell of a battle hommie... my first toppical out of 30+ battles... good battle hommie

aight lets just get the votes in so this shit can be closed.

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blah not gonna vote....ya'll gonna think its d/r now :cool:

aight, this needs to get closed... vote it up please

Voted For: ...Apocalypse...

...Apocalypse...:
i liked the topical you have here heaven n shit good idea...well yuo played him of coarse look at his verse its plain weak lol...you had nice vocab hella long dawg...its just the way you did it, it made it come out hard its well done liked your verse you had dope stucture and flow to...8.5/10

BigPappa76:
um that was hella weak lol...why would you even rap? your weak dawg like you dont have a chance in (hell) for bein the 50th brigades leader triple and all them will leave soon...cuz your a weak rapper so ya...no hate but man you have basic vocab no stucture needs work and your topic was off flow needs work...what can i say...3/10

VOTE: ...Apocalypse...

return the favour as soon as schema posts his verse just keep lookin...links in the sig aight peace

xclusive u can suck a dick aight? ive been in 32 battles faggot. this is my FIRST toppical, i didnt expect to win... u wanna find out if i suck lets do text, u and me faggot... fuckin homo bitch

Voted For: ...Apocalypse...

...Heaven...

Feeling ignored, neglected, constantly "un-respected"
The games god plays is like a losing set of "checkers.."
It all started at first, when my wife riped my "heart out.."
Began losing days sleeping, not eating, suffering "hard out.."
only jesus christ himself can contridict my "actions"
judge my whole life...not just my dark sided "fractions"
so everyday i pray on my death bed to see "heaven"
as i go to church to tarnish my past an spill my soul to tha "reveren"
ive done alot of dirty deed's through life i planted wrongful "seeds"
for-filling crack addicts needs to feel pain brings joy as on tha cross jesus bleeds
i commited awful sins an saw satan solemly grin as christ "frowns"
money was thin pushin cocaine by tha pounds now my money in "mounds"
but that wasnt tha life to lead just anutha statistic drawn to "greed"
simplicity is the key now ive grown aware that only this bible i "need"
everything does happen for a reason born into this world a "hethen"
i was blinded to see then holy father all i needed was somethin to belive in
maybe that coulda prevented tha evil things ive "commited"
but as i grasp this bible tha wings of heaven have me "uplifted"
my note book provides my knowlege to all tha things i "know"
as i flat line iv bags sink low........its my time to "go"



...Hell...

Skitsophrenic intentions for the sadistic ending of life..
What problems, Im never fearing any form of worldly strife..
Living on the bad side of the tracks, became my own slogan..
Needing lies to break many men, grasping the truth broken..
My mind, it would seem is an evil chaotic artistic tapestry..
Plagued with horrific visions, Im dead living, actually..
I couldnt seperate, thin lines between whats real and fiction..
Compleatly insane, its unknown to the extent of my addiction..
Fuck it, I am the devil.. Disguised in the skin of a man..
Death, violance, curruption and terror, are all considered fam..
The four horsemen lead my apocolypse, Famine controls my legion..
God, look at me now!! The red dragon, Collapsing the garden of edin..
You see, no longer mortal, slitting my wrists not feeling pain..
But I am numb.. My sight fades as blood runs down the drain..
The sensation is something Ive forgotton for many years..
What have I done, I now know why blood is thicker then tears..
Im ruined.. A distraught mind, staring at a blood clenched fist..
Finally my eyes close, now Im surrounded in an endless red mist.

after reading this verse, it just blew im my head...that he won no boubt..

my vote is apoc.