speechlessness has come over me after reading that piece.100/100.keep em' comin'.

First off u think ur life is hard, Depends how u look at it, dependz how u play ur card, im tellin u straight that ur thinkin like a retard, now remember n regard that everybody in life gets scarred..

N Right now ur outta jail, it dont matta if u out on bail, u can still go an look up at tha starz, feel happy dat u aint still behind barz, Jus dont be crazy, dont be thinkin 2 go out n rob a few carz...

Don't sit down n think, start makin ureself depressed, ur alive so think of ureself as blessed... Sumtimes even i feel down, an insted of wearin a smile i wear a frown...

Im jus a white 16 yr old livin in a UK ghetto keepin it real, racism is ma biggest problem, u feel.. Unlike otha white ppl i aint rich.. bein round black ppl all tha time, hearin dem call eachotha nigga's startin to feel a bitch, sumtimes i feel i dont fit in ... wen ppl say shit like coz im white i shuddnt spit, sayin i shud learn da violin :nono:

Be happy in life n u'll survive, let ure happiness thrive.. for as long as ur alive...

Seriously, u need to start thinkin differently...

i liked had a solid flow nice muiltis i could picture the image well!

Thanks i'll return the feed back

hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm?

“Look girl it’s your birthday and Its Thursday the worse
Can say is I love you and I’m a thug too like your purse
And the mini-skirt wanna do plenty work girl as you know
Rhymes I thrust them in my script right now wanna go
Custom fit your lips// to mine when kissing and stuff
Can hear you puff don’t wear earmuff so I’m clear and ruff
With sex like KOBE body drove me MADD” “wait MADD
You want pound cake so don’t clown or fake I’m glad
My butt round and great,

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Oh yea flywhiteguy i know you might have ment well but daum hommie i asked for feed back not insults look at what you wrote

First off u think ur life is hard, Depends how u look at it, dependz how u play ur card, im tellin u straight that ur thinkin like a retard,


Where im from you think what you were tought
an you learn from what you go through
So how do you think im going to think for the time being
until change comes in to my life,we all got hard times
im just stating some of the facts not all
So people are always going to have there own way of thinking
When i write i write for a sulution not to cause problems
I write to release stress an to clear my mind and it works
So thanks for the feed back but people are always going to have problems
no matter where you go or what you do thats just the way it is
But out of it all God still loves you,,but some of us even refuse to believe
Just because they cant see him or touch him,,but he's always been there for me
And im sure he's always been there for you and others
Dont get me wrong i wrote this to release my stress im feeling some times
But in hip hop you got to watch what you say to people
dog in the future dont post a flow just give me feed back

I would never tell some to think differently if i dont know what they been through
But i will offer the word of God ,because only he can help us think differently
And only he can bring change into any ones life even minds,,,
But thanks for the responce just give feed back instead of a flow
because you could have put that up for the whole site to see
now the only way they see it is through minds not a good thing
I want them to see your work so it can stand alone a shine like all of our work should
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Your words
Seriously, u need to start thinkin differently...


My words
Only God can change my way of thinking
And its not like im out to kill any one so theres not much to change
But only to share my creativity with the world through my pain

Madrapper now i dont know what you were thinking
but feed back wasnt one of them atleast from what i can tell any way


~Your words~
Look girl it’s your birthday and Its Thursday the worse
Can say is I love you and I’m a thug too like your purse
And the mini-skirt wanna do plenty work girl as you know
Rhymes I thrust them in my script right now wanna go
Custom fit your lips// to mine when kissing and stuff
Can hear you puff don’t wear earmuff so I’m clear and ruff
With sex like KOBE body drove me MADD” “wait MADD
You want pound cake so don’t clown or fake I’m glad
My butt round and great,

~My words~
I only needed feed back daum hommie,,lol
its not doing me any good to here about pound cake,
Like i told ol boy just drop some feed an i'lll be happy with that,
Now the only way your flow will be seen is through minds,
Not a good thing it should stand alone and shine like every one elses.
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feed back wouldnt hurt people

Not badd "G" $$$$ :shoot:

aight now we going some where...upping

yo jus remember...jus because white "men"(more like pussies) are in power dont mean white people are...it took my mom 14 years to get us out.....so i kno what its like to struggle...and im white and u kno i got much luv 4 u...keep ur head up cause life is hard iight much luv peace ~1~...

K... so u want sum feedback huh... i aint flowin now... im talkin... well, typin...
i thought dat ur flo woz gud, needz a few more rhymez but yea, it woz gud, gettin ur point across about how u feel well...

Keep em cummin.....
.........safe.

PS.. not all flowz 'Shine'... Tha woz jus sumthin i typed back @ u cos i was bored... tried 2 get ma point bout ur flo back @ u thru another flo... anywayyz l8rzz....

yo sup mic still no holla or pm lol....u didnt forget about me did u i gave u feed on dis and ya other piece...its insane16 boy i changed my anme but still the same mane i kno u remember my ass....cuz i will neva forget u homie....