this is still up..............
lets get some more votes to end this...........

Voted For: intensify effect

To be honest, I really couldn't understand J.R.'s verse. He needs to work on structure and form, because what he posted was confusing and hard to read. If the way he'd written it had been better, perhaps I would've been able to consider his verse, but who wants to waste time look at something like that?

IE structure was poor too, but not as bad as J.R.'s. Work on your stretched lines, guys.

However, I did manage to scavage some multis from J.R.'s verse that I thought were good:

You GETS~NO~RESPECT! This “newbie” could “operate on Animals”, we still BET~HE’S~NO~“VET”/
I remove yo HEAD~FROM~YO~NECK, You couldn't "GAIN INTEREST" on RV if you were "CREDIT~CARD~DEBT"//

But what the fuck is celulite and why spell curse kearse? It just don't make no sense.

My vote goes to IE because he was more original. This got me:

why battle-me son! I "Roast Suckers"... Bustin Hard like Broke-Rubbers...
Smoke and Toast Duckers... I'm like "Ray Stanz" the way I " Ghost - Busters"...

this is u'r stop wait...*ZOOOM*.... u'r skill's is about as close as the nigga in the next coast...
so its "Obviously u'll lose"... but maybe not... why dont u ask George "W" how to cheat out Votes.... BITCH!!

pC.

upp'in to end this already its been going on for a while......

Voted For: J.R. Freeze

Damn This Battle Was Hott As Fuck.. Serious Flames..

BREAKDOWN:


IE

this wack emcee trys to..."Gain The Strength.... like "Steroid-Injections"....
not knowing im "Hard To See" like the "Last Image" in da "mirra Reflecting"...
Damn, Nice Opener.. Hits Hard
im guess'in u thought this was a joke..... not knowning i shatter geeks...
ya "Neck The Truth" and i need to get a "Grip On Reality"..
I Smell Personal
why battle-me son! I "Roast Suckers"... Bustin Hard like Broke-Rubbers...
Smoke and Toast Duckers... I'm like "Ray Stanz" the way I " Ghost - Busters"... *ha get it*
Damn, That Was Flames
I Attack J.R and Strip strips like a "weak beattle juice costume"...
would shot at ya head.... but ya flow already got a Flip-Flop-Tune....
Actually Wasnt Feeling This Man, Not Your Best
this is u'r stop wait...*ZOOOM*.... u'r skill's is about as close as the nigga in the next coast...
so its "Obviously u'll lose"... but maybe not... why dont u ask George "W" how to cheat out Votes.... BITCH!!
OMFG, That Was ..... Damn Best Line Of The Battle

Highlights:
Good Punches, Your Multies Were There..

DimLights:
Only Saw One Personal.

Overall:
This Verse Was On Point But Keep Me Lingering On A Few Lines.


JR

I Diminish this GAL~COMPLETELY, Become a *Violent Pedirtrist* if PLAN~TO~“DE-FEET”~ME, Cause I’m straight *Impaling* this *Dick*like PRINCE~ALBERT~PIERCINGS!!!/
LOL Good Multies And Punch, But Flow is Terrible
*Flip the world Upside side* you Still can’t “RAISE HELL”~ON~THE~MIC, And *working for “SONY”* can’t even give you a *Positive* “STEREO”~“TYPE”, cause this *faggot*
takes more *POUNDS* to the *ASS* than bitches with ~CELULITE~!!! (LMAO!!)
DAMN, Good Multies Good Flow And Good PUnches Back To Back To Back
I’m RAPIN’~HIS~VERSE, I’m *eating you for Lunch*, no need to WAIT~FOR~DESERT…Cause it’s like you facing the *EAGLE’S DEFENCE…There’s no ESCAPING~THIS~“KEARSE”!!!/ (Curse)
Damn Nice Dun, Good Multies
You GETS~NO~RESPECT! This “newbie” could “operate on Animals”, we still BET~HE’S~NO~“VET”/
I remove yo HEAD~FROM~YO~NECK, You couldn't "GAIN INTEREST" on RV if you were "CREDIT~CARD~DEBT"//
(yyyeeeeaaaa)
Damn Hott Closer Nice.


Highlights:
Good Punches, Multies, And Flow

DimLights:
No Personals.....

Overall:
Verse Was On Point, But Could Of Been Alot Hotter With Some More Personals..


Comparison:
Opener : TIE
Closer : IE
Consistencey : JR, Cause IE left Me Hanging ON A Few Bars..


IE, If You Wouldnt Of Left Me Hanging Without A Punch Or Hard Personal Multi At The End Of Those Two Lines.. You Would Have Won This Battle, But JR Squeezed It Out..
JR The Only Thing I Suggest Is Put Your ~Multies Inside The~
So Your Verse Doesnt Look So Sloppy.. And Get Rid Of The " And Use Bold, Cause IT Just Makes It Look Sloppy And Hard To Read, Wich Ruins The Flow Most Of The Time.. GJ


Please Please Please Return An Honest Vote Below..
Its Only Six Lines, So Its Not A Complex Thing..
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^^^ thanks for u'r honest vote.....

upp'in for more...

Voted For: intensify effect

Dope battle by both but I was feeling Inten verse more
then J.R...

Inten best bar,,...
why battle-me son! I "Roast Suckers"... Bustin Hard like Broke-Rubbers...
Smoke and Toast Duckers... I'm like "Ray Stanz" the way I " Ghost - Busters"...
^Dope bar man Nice wordplay vocab and flow, I was
really feeling this one.

J.R.
I remove yo HEAD~FROM~YO~NECK, You couldn't "GAIN INTEREST" on RV if you were "CREDIT~CARD~DEBT
^Nice bar again decent wordplay ok vocab nice flow.

I thought that Inten won this becase his verse was more
complex the J.R's. Inten had an all round better verse but
it was pretty close.

Vote @ Inten

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