uppin this joint prolly for the last time today... gotta go to work soon... holla at ya boy

i lied... uppin this shyt yet again... stop sleepin'

Voted For: Ill-Grammatix

aight both of you are dope a topicals....ummm let me break this down.....anxiety you hd a nice verse yo came really strong in your story and i felt some feeling in it.....Ill-Grammatix i felt you had a great story-line....i felt you put alittle more feeling into it and you had good vocab...so my vote goes to you...but both were great...~1~

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checking polls.....................................both stay up

werd... thanx Ecko... uppin this shyt once again ...

iggidy uppin this bizzanizzle-itch... werd...lol.... that's the new shyt!... bizzanizzle-itch...i'm wildin'

Voted For: Ill-Grammatix



A life without freedom isn’t really a life…
If I couldn’t be a free man, kill me tonight…
3/10
We take it for granted, but we know is essential…
People who aren’t free can never reach their potential…
5/10
Gifts go ignored, when you’re shackled in life…
I’m just so thankful, that we tackled the strife…
3/10
Chains and bars, cuffs and ropes…
Every one of them can cut ya hopes…
2/10
But more than that, when dreams are suffocated…
Ideas are desecrated, instead of demonstrated…
7/10
Everyone can contribute, but most think they’d be ignored…
Which is sad because their ideas should be explored…
3/10
To some freedom doesn’t mean to not be chained…
But to be listened to thoroughly, and not feel shame…
3/10
Government isn’t the only thing that takes freedom away…
It could be a parent to a kid, or a homophobe to a gay…
1/10...No
We can be put down, that’s when we need the strength to get back up….
But some just give up, mentally aren’t strong so they just pack up…
2/10
But not me, I’d say Patrick Henry said it best…
It’s either, “give me liberty or give me death”…
5/10

This was an ok drop
ya wordplay was ok
it could of been better
it was like u kinda was jumpin around
so u need 2have ya vision clear

My mental capacity had the audacity to keep asking me
how I actually slept at night while I comitted blasphemy
6/10
Naturally, I laughed at the thought of a thought harrassing me
Attacking me until reality started surpassing me
5/10
My conscience revealed the contents of an obnoxious
Ignoramous trapped in his own cage without a locksmith
7/10
yearnin' to lift the burden...stop the pain, reduce the hurtin'
Preferring a higher learnin' than post-existential burnin'
6/10
Now a new man is emergin'... the other dead in the sea
setting the scene, becoming what he was destined to be
3/10
That textbook definition of freedom was insufficient
Intentionally put together to favor certain conditions
6/10
We're worshipping chains when chains were used when murdering slaves
our cars became "whips"... ancestors turning in graves
5/10
See the logic? Our master was replaced by objects
The slave quarters of yesterday are today's projects
6/10...Nice concept
neglected ... disrespected ... rejected ... and unprotected
our psyche has been molested; old wounds became infected
6/10
my aim is to lay claim to my mind and exchange my perceptions
by asking questions in countless sessions of life's learning lessons
4/10
then i'll boldly go where no man or no fear can ever hold me
and holler out "Kunta Kinte!!!" while the rest still think they're Toby
6/10

nice wordplay
nice vision
wha u were tryin 2 get across stood out
and ya wordplay went well with your vision

overall this was a nice topical battle

werd.... almost over... holla back so we can end this crap

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nice verse both....just checkin' the polls...M.A.B takin over!

Voted For: Ill-Grammatix

^You know that uping this for my Boi you heard....

Come on now!!!

1~

werd... uppin this shyt hopefully for the last time... all i need is one... make it count, y'all... werd

Voted For: Ill-Grammatix

i liked IG's verse better even tho it was pretty flowery and verbose, it flowed well and had a nice logical order to it. but props to both on their verses keep doin ya thing on tha topical jumpoffs.
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