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Voted For: .Indeph.
v/Indeph. aight breakdown inception-i realize this was a freestyle battle but yoyr lines first of all didnt rhyme too well at the end......your lines were really really strecthced.....so in part if completely screwed your structure.....you had decent flow............you lacked personals.....and i felt it was racisit in ways unless ur black you shouldnt have sai the black prez line or nukka...just made me feel ur verse a lil less is all..decent vocab but you stated his name too much which became like a filler in places...you coulda used his name and made a personal about it tho.......your punches were okay some were good some werent....overall 6/10 indeph.-aight i got this freestyle cuz one your lines had end rhyming..............your punches were hittin harder than his.......you had def a better structure than he did......you had a personal in there which was nice.........you also added humor which i like to see in a battle.....you coulda came with better vocab but its acceptable since it was a freestlye so you dont have time to think up big words...lol.......but nice drop flowed good too.....keep it up..........overall 8/10 best lines inception- Nukka My Strapz Iz Flagrant You Act Tuff, Then Get Smacked To Pavement I'll Splatta Dis Rookie Lips On Da Rail-Roads So He Can Try An Re-Trackt His Statements ^^nice multi's indeph.- you desperate for any attention..mashing keys for press!.. you on your back..one sided..so it is no contest.. ^^clever I'm done waiting on this..pussy...verse to be released eat some cherios..its the only way you get OOO's in ay peice.. ^^humerous v/Indeph. return tha favor links in sig :thumbup: |
Voted For: Inception
damm i like this verse he had way harder punchs then .Indeph. you had better flow an mulitys was good so was wordplay what can i say he merk you kid no beef |
wow we got votez
i am black nigga why else would i make a line like that and for other shit about stretched linez multiez= no stretched linez it still flowz perfectly |
Voted For: .Indeph.
u both got similar names its pissin me off lol...any heres ma explanation. inception i aint bein funny but u need ta elevate man...i were'nt feeling any of ya punches. You had a few good personals n thats about it. A lot of u r verses didnt rhyme also, so that was another downfall, but ya vocab is good n everything, but my advice is to keep practicing n analyze da vets styles n see what they do man with there punches. I aint talking bout da vets on dis site man coz there wack, go to www.holla-front.com and check out nyvillan18yrold. I learnt alot from dat kid. Most of da guys on that site are extreme veterans n when i say dat i mean they could literally shit allover carsonjett n them chumps. peace Indeph man reason im giving this ta you is because of ya structure mainly. U r punches werent all that but they were there n u had the right set up, so thats good. i know it dun matter as much as personals but if you can make a good long word at the end of ya sentence it really helps, coz u can break it down wit multies, or just use 2 multies at da end of each verse, because when portrayed wit da right punch n set up it can sound dope ite....peace My vote = Indepth |
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Voted For: .Indeph.
I like line 5 and 6 from indepth, good battle both...I had to read it like twice to encompass the messages in this battle... indepth had good punches,like the "look at this one"... the cheerios was played though, good personals and good wordplay... inception came harder though...this was a close battle,I like bar 4 from inception about the graves for aliens, and he ended strong wit da black president thing... anyhow I will vote for indepth cuz I was feeling his more but this was a good battle... uppin!! |
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Voted For: .Indeph.
Indepth's Punches And Wordplay Was Stronger And More Original... And He Had A More Unique/Consistant Flow... Overall His Ish Was Just Better... Vote: Idepth .One. |
Voted For: .Indeph.
Indeph,,... Nice verse man opener was nice I liked the complexety. Vocab was nicely used not too much but droped in the right place. Punches hit hard,,... Best barz challengin me to a freestyling competetion in text.. though you need to get pass inception..to finish indeph.. you desperate for any attention..mashing keys for press!.. you on your back..one sided..so it is no contest.. ^Dope punch hit hard with a nice personal... Inception,... Come nice didn't have the same complexity InD had used some good wordplay and vocab at times but losted it at times... Best barz: Ya Drop Wack-Statementz! So I'll Decypher Your Lungz An Hack-Ya-AirVentz I'll Attack-Your-Intentz Cuz Indeph Aint Seein DC Like A Black-Prezident ^The close nice punch man... All round nice battle but Ind won this easy.. Vote ~ Ind |
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