Voted For: teknikal vuez

Drop ~this wack~, wit more ~raps than bags~
and put the Trey Duece to his Chest Like A Six Pack of Abs =-
^^^^^^^^^^ DONT STRETCH CHA LINES THAT MUCH BUT GOOD PUNCH THOUGH



You get ~bitched slapped~, for ~acting bad, you fag~
You say my punches dont hit? But you absorb every jab =-
^^^^^^^^^^ THAT COULD'VE BEEN BETTER NOT AN GOOD PUNCH



Your just a ~terrible fad~ something that ~Goes Away~
Cause Like The Flaming AK Your Also Known ~As Gay~ =-
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ NAW NOT AN GOOD PUNCH ELEVATE HOMIE


OVERALL= OK U STARTED GOOD THEN THE LAST 2 BAR'Z U KINDA FEEL OFF FAM......ELEVATE ON PUNCHES AND STRUTURE FAM


Then realign the stars to read “u don’t have shit on my raps”
If dick riding wasn’t breaking the rules, he’d sit on my lap
Now read your sig out loud, and quickly beg for repentance
Cause you can’t beat me, if u cant make a complete sentence
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ GOOD FLOW BUT DA PUNCHES AINT HITTIN U JUST SAYING ABOUT YA RAPS AND SHIT START HITTIN AT HIM



Its easy to continue my murderous rampage, so I’m still flowin’
But I destroyed you in the first 2 lines...Why am I still going?
^^^^^^^^^^^^^ NOT AN GOOD CLOSA...NOT AN GOOD PUNCH


OVERALL= THIS VERSE WAS KINDA WEAK I DIDNT SENSE ANY HARD PUNCHES HE JUST KEPT BLABING ON ABOUT HIS RAPS AND THE CLOSA IT WASNT GOOD FAM




CONCLUSION= AIIIGHT BOTH OF U NEED TO ELEVATE~~!


VUEZ- ELEVATE ON STRUTURE......AND USING HARD PUNCHES

LYRICAL= ELEVATE USING HARDER PUNCHES



NOW........THIS IS AN WEAK BATTLE BOTH OF U HAD AN LIL FLOW BUT I GOTS TO GO WITH THE PERSON WHO HAD HARDER PUNCHES AND ACTUALLY THROWING THEM>VUEZ GETS MY VOTE HE ACTUALLY WAS THROWIN PUNCHES AT LYRICAL..BUT LYRICAL DIDNT THREW ANY HARD PUNCHES HE JUST KEPT BLABING ON ABOUT HIS RAPS.....SO THAT WAS KINDA PLAYED OUT...........


V-VUEZ

This was feedback posted for ..Lyrical..
 

just checkin the poles.....cant vote cuz tek is in my crew

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Voted For: teknikal vuez

teknikal vuez came for useing new stuff all the stuff u said was used but in diffrent ways i've been on this sites for long so i kno whats been used and what hasn't and that stuff been used not saying u bitin or anything its just played ou :thumbup: teknikalfor 1 u came harder than this cat lyrical and u put a little bad wordplay u need to come more complecated u kno so work on that

Lyrical u came so played like u look'd up stuff and reused it like Jay-Z welll


Flow: Tek
Punches: Tied [ Weak ]
Structure: Tek.
Personals: Tek
Overall: Tek. 43/100 lyric. 35/100

Voted For: teknikal vuez

Drop ~this wack~, wit more ~raps than bags~
and put the Trey Duece to his Chest Like A Six Pack of Abs =-
(decent opener, flows well, and hits, but try not to use gunz...8/10)

You get ~bitched slapped~, for ~acting bad, you fag~
You say my punches dont hit? But you absorb every jab =-
(nice multie use and wordplay...8/10)

Your just a ~terrible fad~ something that ~Goes Away~
Cause Like The Flaming AK Your Also Known ~As Gay~ =-
(kinda weak closer, but good flow, and wordplay, 7/10)


Then realign the stars to read “u don’t have shit on my raps”
If dick riding wasn’t breaking the rules, he’d sit on my lap
(kinda dont make sense, how do u start with then? n e ways, nice flow, and decent punch, 7/10)

Now read your sig out loud, and quickly beg for repentance
Cause you can’t beat me, if u cant make a complete sentence
(WEAK BAR, BUT HAS GOOD FLOW, 6/10)

Its easy to continue my murderous rampage, so I’m still flowin’
But I destroyed you in the first 2 lines...Why am I still going?
(WEAK CLOSER, NICE FLOW, AND VOCAB, 6/10)

AIGHT..teknikal vuez..YOUR FLOW WAS GOOD, STRUCTURE IS OKAY, BUT TRY NOT TO BE ALL OVER THE PLACE, JUST FLOW MAN....NONE OF THAT ~~@@#$!@#$@# SHIT...IT MAKES YOUR VERSE LOOK UNPROFESSIONAL, AND SLOPPY...N E WAYS...YOU HAD GOOD USE OF VOCAB, MULTIES, PUNCHES WERE GOOD, AND EVERYLINE BEAT LYRICALS...SO U GET MY VOTE BECAUSE IT WAS JUST BETTER.



AIGHT..LYRICAL..YOUR FLOW IS GOOD, AS WELL AS YOUR STRUCTURE, BUT THIS IS A BATTLE OF PUNCHES, DISSES, MULTIES, ETC...YOU DONT HAVE ANY THAT ARE GOOD...WORK ON YOUR DISS FACTOR, AND ELEVATE FROM THERE...OTHER THAN THAT YOU ARE OK...


VOTE TEKNIKAL VUEZ