u 12-10 u just suck and it aint even cuz u a rookie u just suck

upp'in this bitch up up up up and anway she lows kiddies

upp'in to end this battle been up for a long time

upp'in to end the madness shit been up for months what the fuck

This was feedback posted for hang-man
 

checkin polls nice name metaphor.....................

Voted For: the metaphor

Votin for meta


Meta got dis due to harder punchlines n a well based overall verse his flow was on check n he had a pretty descent structure
Elevate on ya multies n thorw some hard personals n the verse meta itll get ya wins
Overall ya verse was good jus elevate on personals n sum multies

Hang ya verse was good but ened a lil soft n that threw me off Ya need sum personals n multies as well
ya lines were a lil originial not very creative so try n get sum newlyics to spit at him

I was feelin boht verses it all came down to punches n meta jus came harder with punches

overall:
Punches- Meat
Structure- Tie
Multies- None
Personals- None
flow- Tie


good battle fams be sure to RTF n da battles

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tm- Verse was nice...so was your punches....Had some nice sick azz personals also....Structure was decent...easy to read n all...but overall your won this with a better overall verse and punches...8.6/10........

hang man - your verse was nice a little, but your punches really didnt seem to connect hard enough...your structure was layed out nice...but you went weak on punches thats all...5.9/10.......

V/ tm
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meta tok this

overall i thought metas verse was better it was more focused overall and had some good punches...one thing though put some multies in your verse ..but otherwise not a bad verse
hang man you need a lil work youi have the concept you just don't have the right vocab for it i suggest you go back and practice some ..

both of you even up your structs and up your vocab

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