nice shit bro. in one word - enthralling. haha. it doesnt work how u wrote 'an' instead of 'a' tho in places. (Like an cloud, It was an hawk, took out an pencil) u only write 'an' if the first letter of the next word is a vowel. other than that this was a good read. keep em coming. tight.
|
Uppin For This Shit.............................chea
|
this was a good piece...i was feelin tha dream part cause you made it seem more vivid...almost like you could envision what you was sayin...i give ya a 8/10..could have been more elaborate on tha sleep part...but still a good poem...keep writein man
...holla at ya gurl |
O Thanx Ma Appreciate The Feedback.............chea Uppin I'll Return Fav'z
|
Cheaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa Upppin
|
this was good for poetry which i really dont like lol but i liked this emotion was straight
y does everyone make their poetr on here flow grrrrr lol make a haiku i like those plain and simple lol |
Uppin For More Feedbacks....................shit I Got The Most Feedbacks Hehehe Werd
|
Uppin For Feedback Uppin For Feedback Werd...........
|
damn nice drop man nice drop it was hot liked it felt the flow all the way through it nice Keep it up man 9/10
|
O Aight Thanks Fam.............................uppin For More Feedbacks Chea
|
^^^poem Of The Month^^^^ .............uppin
|
Quote:
My alias!...................I used to love the old days :thumbup: |
All times are GMT -4. The time now is 05:15 AM. |