weedex you a fucking whore.... stop hating on me and fuck off you cock

uppin this........

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Voted For: 4fil

I think that 4fil got this battle because i feel that 4fil came stronger in the following categories...Topic i felt 4fil got it was effective and was on point Led Poetic u shoulda been a bit more creative on this occasion rhyming i felt went to 4fil seeing as Led Didn't even rhyme it's a topical not a poetic battle...wordplay and creativity goes to 4fil and flow and structure i'll give to 4fil.

V/4fil RTF on this plz... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=166392

Voted For: led poetic

this was a good battle altogether....

LED:again your piece was nice...i liked your structure it was dope...you story line was good....and vocab was great.....and a good flow...nice piece overall....overall:9/10
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4fil:you had a good piece to..i liked your strucutre....you had a pretty good story line....but the only thing that threw you off was your flow...it wasn't there...and wasn't really feeling it...good piece from both....overall:8/10

and as for you 4fil.... it has nothing to do with RB its called freeversing it... its a style to writing poetry / topical verses and just writing ingeneral...

but yeah uppin

aight whatever....... thats your style.... all good...
but when i do topicals.... i just rhyme

This was feedback posted for 4fil
 

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Voted For: 4fil

yo this is to long to brake down so if this aint good enough pm me to add on to my brake down aight.....

Led Poetic dont ever use them small lettering ever again u made it mad hard to read and follow ya shit so right there u lost cool-aid points.... but ya verse was soiled u stood on topic and had a couple of emotion brought out well but the structure was all fucked up but not a bad verse 7.5/10

4fil u'r verse was one i can relate to more with the contruction thing looking for money to servive is what i use to do constrction but i lost that job due to pricks who talk shit but anyways i felt u had more focus on this topic u stood on topic u made the read feel as if u was telling a real life story and had me into it all the way the intro was good the verse was good all around tight flow nice structure was way better and easy to read and follow u won this hands down...
9.0/10


* if it need to be more in depth let me know and i will.....

thanks for that.... uppin for votes

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Voted For: 4fil

I felt a lil in this topical but no hate you had some good versus to. But his topical just spoke to me more and he had some good lines that I thought where iight and these are the lines that got my vote.




I sat on my bed, tears trickling down my eyes
Cold and lonely, suddenly I thought of suicide
My pride was low, then I thought of a new job
I picked up the news paper, and my eyes just stopped
On an article about a movie, I thought I could star in that
I got my hopes up, put the paper down on my lap
Imagined me as a super star, so I decided to go audition
Got the bus into town, and I was high off my ambitions

And I think he just played the topical well and you did to but just keep working on it peace. And hit up on my links please.

oh shit I ment lil and hit up on 4fil's could a mod just please reverse the vote or close that vote thnx. dammit sorry lol ;D.