thanks alot man

ok well youve elevated a little bit but only on vocab as i see...your starting to force lines...i didnt understand some of that..but it was a good use of vocab and shit you know what i mean...but you also used a good use of emotion and metaphores...

shit man being honest here you are gettin worse..but still good vocabulary...weerd

7.3/10

this was a good piece written with feeling, but it was one line in there standing alone, like half a bar with no rhyme, it was the only discouraging thing though.

iight imma work on that next time

iight upupupupupu

it was alright but i could pul better shit outa my ass. i dont rate other peoples shit cause they all 10/10 in there own way

thanks man.........