thanx it might read that way but if u ever been in the booth or rapped to your self u know that u can make anything even out while your rappin with your breathin and patterns thats how i do it i write exactly whati feel exactly how it comes out an di make the structure as i spit it somesongs that ive written one stanza is longr than the other some shorter but the way i spit it evens it all out

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this was a real nice piece, the emotion was felt....and you came good with it....concept may have been done before but you seemed to switch it and so it seemed original...anyway keep it up 8/10....

thanx for the feed back !!!

This poem is deep, nice vocabulary and content, you have a lot to say, and its good to let it out, very well written, please, dont up your work more then 4 times....its hard enough i have to erase em all, this just gives others chances to get their work viewed, you've got talent, so write more..1

thanx 4 the feed yo!!