| N-Demik |
07-21-02 11:24 AM |
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I liked it in places, thought the concept was sharp in places, it was mos def a good idea and ya explored it well... The knowledge words were important here, thats what ya needed to know and you did use a lot, it was interesting to read, but it shoulda been built up through a storyline or a twist or something... The rhyme scheme was tidy well used, more internal rhymes woulda made it flawless... Vocab and wordplay combined well together, but I think ya shoulda pushed it further by making the concept more interesting... Keep spitting though man, liked this a lot still...
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RhetoriX Said Everything That I Would Have Said..
I Was Feeling Tha Concept, I Like Martial Art Concept Pieces ..
Plus I Was Just Listening To Language Arts By Tha Arsonists, Which Made Me Feel It More..
Keep It Up Bro.. |
