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Voted For: Killa Mane

Killa
u had some decent punches
the flow was a little choppy but good
structure was blah, work on that
and u had some good persona's..
6/10

Dio
ur punches werent as hard hittin
as ur battle wit Lil A...ur flow was
on point, and ur structure was good
overall, ur punches could've hittin harder
though

This was feedback posted for Dio Deus
 

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Voted For: Killa Mane

Killa Mane took this one. The only real punch dio deus had was the michael jackson joke and those jokes are played. the first bar didn't rhyme and the closer...anyway. Killa Mane's punches weren't magnificent but they were better than dio deus's. The only thing wrong with his verse was the closer. It was a little weak. Anyway this goes to killa mane.

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Voted For: Killa Mane

Dio Deus

This probably gon' be a "motherfuck your mother battle"
cause you a beginner while my spits are lethal
^doesn't do the trick

you get fucked up harder then the kids in michael jacksons bedroom
Don't drop your verse you'll make it worse you don't have too
^good one!

no personals or wordplay needed, to defeat you
the victory there ain't votes need to see who's...........
^decent

^^ They are needed in fact...Vocab n structure were good, definately feeling your flow. 2nd bar was nice but the rest was kinda weak and with a 6 line battle, you have to drop fire throughout whole thing! Keep on battling and read other battles to get better...no hate though...


Killa Mane

Dio receive's 'Killa' anal, like he waz hit on by a gay convict.
Clearly ya initial's say it all, ya hopeless with ya 'Blind' spit's.
^hehe,funny...

DD's hungry, cos he didn't even know what 'feedin' meant.
Got a ghostwriter?..well judgin' by ya battle's, it's ain't 'cash well spent'.
^nice one

Kid enjoy's daisy chain's, but even his homo-erotic pal's think he the weakest link.
Cuz your rhyme's are more horrible & ghastly than 'Monster's Ink'.
^haha,dope closer

Props to you, good battle...Vocab was tight, structure was good and ya flow was straight on point.Had some creative punches in there,mad hardhitting personals and funny wordplay. Nice job man!

we need votes............

Voted For: Killa Mane

nice verses from both there.

Killa Mane: Ya open was ok. Good use of metaphor but the punch seemed not tohit with its full effect and the personal didnt pull off. But it was still better than his opener. Ya middle bar was cool, defo feelin it good personal punch that hit well. Your close was good too. Good punch, good metaphor and entertaining. Your structure was ok, a stretched line but that didnt make any difference, was still readable easily, flow was ok aswell. Nice verse bro, I liked to read it.

Dio Deus: Your opener really let you down im afraid bro. I dont think it matters where your from, battle and lethal dont rhyme. Plus i dont think the bar actually made much sense. Middle bar was ok, very basic looking, get some wordplay or multis or somethin a little more exciting into it and your laughing cos it was an ok punch. Your closer was better than the rest. You left it on a good note. Your flow and structure are good, making it easier to reaed therefore easier to follow and mark, let down by the basic-look of the punches and overall verse but dont worry bro, keep elevating and you will be real good before you know it.

yeah I never heard the word lathal, only read it, plus I'm comin' from holland, so I didn't really know, so that kinda screws up my battle, too bad

Voted For: Killa Mane

opena: killa mane
punches: killa
vocab: killa
structure: killa
multis: killa
overall: killa
my vote goes 2 killa mane