Yeah....I was feeling this one. It just flowed nicely from beginning to end.....Good Job Man :thumbup:

OMFG.......i loved this piece mayne....i love emotion in writin and this had it all the way through....this is were the rea rappinl skillz are at..and u proved it..topic was good...structure was good..nice wordplay..rhymin was good......but DAYUM..the endin killed it.....real nice twist....this was hot from start to end.....was really feelin this...definetly lookin out for more ur work...keep em comin...

return the fav please..link in sig..pz

uppin this shit richurr

uppin again.....................

^^^UP!!!............UP!!!............UP AND AWAY!!!^^^


s.v........c.s.

Why Is Ya Suff So Bright LOL But Ne ways I Like ya peiece Basically everybody else than already siad what i was gonna say but hey atleast you know wher you are LOL L

Stay Up And Active
Peace

i'm beginning to think people purposely ignore my shit...cause they know they'll feel obligated to vote for me in one category or another...

This is just Beautiful.I love that you didn't rely on multis
to impress the readers.This type of rap is the reason I rap today.
Real shit,which expresses feeling and displays a messege of emotion.

Much Props seriously nigga.

ey man imma go wit prophecy on dat man ya whole shit was good,u had good structa,flow,and vocab.ey man u keep doin ya thing i like dat shit.10/10....give me some feed back on mines "im bac bitch"

uppin this piece..this has to deserve some kind of nomination..honestly..

uppin this....cause it needs to be read

10/10... emotion to fullest... damn... I feel that... cuz that's how I feel sometimes to... I think I got a tear jerked from that... That's awesome man. best shit I've ever read... fuck what anyone else says.

dope again as usually.i personally think your the only poet on the site stands a chance aganist me.all your work is basically the same perfection.perfect syllabel count good imagery nice vocab everything meshes so well in your drops.nice shit 10/10

Whoa, Concept Was FIRE...I Really Felt Tha Emotion, Every Word Was Real...& Tha Lil Twist At Tha End Was Perfect

Fav Lines:

I love you, even though it hurts because i never see you..
It's not enough to be connected at the soul, i wanna be you..
I think about you constantly, Kissing you in my flashblacks..
and whenever i tried to be smooth, i remember gettin laughed at..
It didn't hurt me though, I knew it was because I didn't need to..
I felt everything that you did, if you got cut, i'd bleed too..

All Of That Was Real, Serious OM, Tha Imagery Was Fierce Homie....10/10 RRR(Real Rec Real)

Im new but this was very nicely done! i was feeling the concept and the comedy aspects as in you said trying to be smoothe and getting laughed at! weve all been there lol!

i think this was very creative your strengths are that you can keep the story and the message going nicely
your only weakness i can see is that i think you need to try and use multies more!

other than that keep up the hot oms i was feelin it a lot!